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Can someone please check out "New Moon" for me? Thanks. I just want to make sure that it's interesting enough. (I plan on adding some twists later though...)

 

http://www.backyardchickens.com/t/659504/new-moon-tribe-a-werecreature-shapeshifter-rp-now-open


Edited by LittleLady98 - 5/10/12 at 9:34am

News Flash!!: My hobby is writing stories and drawing, and I'm an editor for a magazine. I have meetings every Monday afternoon, so I can almost guarantee that I won't log on that day.

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News Flash!!: My hobby is writing stories and drawing, and I'm an editor for a magazine. I have meetings every Monday afternoon, so I can almost guarantee that I won't log on that day.

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post #62 of 135

A mysterious disease has wiped out the human race. The few survivors are mutated. They are now werewolves, werecats, werefoxes, and a few shapeshifters. It has been over 3,000 years since then, and now the planet is alive again. There are many Creatures now. They live in harmony together as one tribe. All are lead by the Alphas, the Alphas take care of any major problems. Police take care of other problems. 

The first thing I want to suggest is to make your front page more attractive. Theres very little color and it looks messy and disorganized. If you look at the front page of The Story of my Life or Avalon, the front page has color and its well organized. This story seems very repetative, I feel like I've seen it before. You already had a werewolf/werecat roleplay which died off, this idea is very similar, why not trying something different? Unique? I do see some potential in this, but you need to develop the story more. This just seems very thrown together with not a lot of thought put into it.

 

 

New Moon was the first tribe that included all of the different Creatures, first led by Kidar I (Omri's ancestor.) , over 3 thousand years ago.

 

 

 

 

Rules: 

 

Do NOT RP unless I have approved of your form!

Keep any RP fights realistic, you cannot hit/miss everytime!

Keep any RL fights in PMs!

If you don't like the RP, then don't post.

If you have nothing nice to say, then don't post.

Have fun! frow.gif

Your rules are very basic and not very specific. This is just me, but I am not a fan of the first rule. It may be your thread, but you have little say in who can and who cannot post on it. For the third rule, you should spell out "real life", too many abbreviations is confusing. The last two rules I really don't like, if I were a new user considering joining this RP, those two rules would really turn me off. They are very unwelcoming.

 

Ranks:

 

Alpha male (Taken)

Alpha female (Taken)

Beta male (Open)

Beta female (Open)

Heir [will be Alpha when the previous Alpha dies] (Reserved)

General of the Army (Taken)

Warrior (Unlimited)

Upper Mystic [Uses magic, and teaches the healers] (Only 5)

Lesser Mystic [Uses magic, but has less powers than an Upper Mystic] (Only 10)

Police Chief (Open)

Police Officer (Unlimited)

Bounty hunter (9 places left)

Healer (Up to 20)

Assistant Healer (Unlimited)

Head Prison guards (9 spaces left)

Guard (Unlimited)

Farmer (Unlimited)

Rancher (Unlimited) [A rancher raises cattle and other sorts of food for the Tribe]

Villager (Unlimited)

I like the thought you put into creating all these ranks, but too many ranks can be confusing on an RP. The farmers/ranchers/villagers can all be combined into one rank, same with the head guards and guards. I don't see a need for betas or so many mystics.

 

Form:

 

Name:

Rank:

Age:

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.):

Appearance:

Personality:

Mate/Crush:

History:

Other:

Pic:

Username:

I wouldn't have the mate/crush space, when people are first joining they won't have a mate/crush unless its another character RPed by the same player.

 

 

 

Characters:

 

 

Name: Omri McCartney

Rank: Alpha Male

Age: 25

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: Tall, muscular, handsome. He is bigger than most.

Personality: Kind, wise, would die for his Tribe, fearless, compassionate.

Mate/Crush: Viridi

History: His family have been the Alphas ever since the Humans were wiped out. He was taught to honor the ancient ways, and ask the spirits of his ancestors for help if he needed it.

Other: Is 10x stronger than most of the other werewolves. When angered, his claws sharpen and can become tipped with poison.

Pic:

Username: LittleLady98

Definantly a Gary Sue. This character is large, 10x muscular, kind, wise, fearless, compassionate, poison tipped claws etc. Not very interesting.

 

 

Name: Viridi

Rank: Alpha Female (If Availiable if not then a warrior)

Age: 17

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Personality: Very calming and nice. She is fearless and brave. She believes in peace.

Pic: 

Username: IMMASHEIK

Mary Sue. Not nearly enough information, especially since this character is important (the alpha female).

 

Name: Eric Kingsman

Rank: Warrior

Age: 22

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Weretiger

Appearance: See pics

Personality: Fearless, brave, caring, merciful.

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He grew up in New Moon, and was one of the best when it came to his fighting skills. He never really knew his parents, because they dropped him off at Kimdar Training school when he was very young.

Other: Can do a little bit of air bending. Is close friends with the Alphas.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Gary Sue

 

Name: Diana Sperling

Rank: Assistant Healer

Age: 20

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Very sweet, caring. Firm with her patients.

Mate/Crush: None yet.

History: She was the only daughter of an Upper Mystic, and was trained in healing. She didn't attend Kimdar Training school because she didn't want to be a warrior.

Other: Has a natural gift for healing.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

 

Name: Marcus Remini

Rank: Head Prison Guard

Age: 32

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werebear

Appearance: See-pic

Personality: Harsh, can get angered easily, is nice only to the alphas

Mate/Crush: Unknown

History: He has always been alone, no one ever speaks to him which caused his anti-social behavior.

Other: He is skilled in hand-to-hand combat.

Pic: 

Username: armdchicken

 

Name: Maddie Cooper

Rank: Villager

Age: 21

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): werefox

Appearance: See Pic

Personality: Cunning, she doesn't talk much, and she can be nice when it benefits her.

Mate/Crush: Unknown

History: Her parents were killed and she was living off the streets. She had to steal to live.

Other: She is very good at stealing things and is always trying to steal.

Pic: 

Username: armdchicken

 

 

Name: Wynona Marquis

Rank: Army General

Age: 33

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werecow (( rofl. ))

Appearance: Although she is built like a tank, and stands at a towering 6'9, she still possesses some feminine beauty and charm in her kind green eyes, and flowing mane. She wears heavy battle armour.

Personality: Headstrong and demanding, will not allow anyone or anything to get in her way. She is so loyal to her tribe that she would die for it. She is, however, easily angered. Especially if disobeyed.

Mate/Crush: None at the moment.

History: She lived in a tribe of her type that lived much like Native Americans. After growing older and succeeding in her warrior training, she left in search of a new form of life.

Other: N/A

Pic: 

Username: Zinnia-Hen

 

 

Name: Seth Ramis

Rank: Warrior

Age: 35

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Minotaur

Appearance: Extremely large, very muscular, and surprisingly handsome. He is at least 7'5'' tall. His dusty grey fur is usually covered by armor. He always carries his ax with him.

Personality: Tough, but kind. He would die before giving up in a fight. 

Mate/Crush: He would never admit it, but he has a crush on Wynona.

History: The only thing anyone knows is that he was left on the doorstep of the training school. He grew up there, and was the strongest student. 

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Gary Sue

 

Name: Kalista Maldives V of Whitebluff

Rank: Villager

Age: 18

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See picture

Personality: A bit of a spoiled, overly feminine brat.

Mate/Crush: None at the time.

History: Kalista grew up far away in a small, secluded kingdom as a Princess. Eventually, she was kicked out by the court for being an immature tyrant. She is now seeking refuge with the New Moon tribe.

Other: She often uses her attractive appearance as an excuse.

Pic: 

Username: Zinnia-Hen

 

Name: Sir Alexander Uenda of Whitebluff

Rank: Villager

Age: 27

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Weretiger

Appearance: Some say he's a little boy trapped in a manly-man's body. He is quite slim.

Personality: Nervous, always wishing to please Kalista and the Alphas. Quite the coward as well.

Mate/Crush: He only has eyes for Kalista, whom he serves. Though they are not mates, he has a large amount of love for her. Alexander simply does not want to admit it, as he knows the woman he serves isn't interested in him.

History: He lived in the same kingdom as Kalista, and came with her when she was banished.

Other: N/A

Pic: 

Username: Zinnia-Hen

 

 

Name: Jack Farley

Rank: Rancher/Villager

Age: 24

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Anthro Horse

Appearance: Tall, rugged handsome looks, muscular, and pretty large.

Personality: Kind, caring, firm. He would make a great warrior, but he doesn't like to fight.

Mate/Crush: None yet.

History: He grew up in New Moon. He was an orphan, but didn't let his hard life stop him from becoming a wealthy rancher.

Other: Volunteers to help others.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Jessica Glade

Rank: Villager

Age: 21

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Anthro Horse

Appearance: Very beautiful, tall, slender.

Personality: Very sweet, kind, caring, and lovable.

Mate/Crush: None yet.

History: She was raised normally in the valley with her people, but a sickness swept through, ans almost everyone in her village died. She  escaped before catching the sickness, and came to New Moon.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Mary Sue

 

Name: Kenai Vanas

Rank: Warrior

Age: 17

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Very quiet, never says much.

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He was a rebel before going to the training school. He didn't listen to anyone.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Not enough information

 

Name: Shane Havan

Rank: Warrior

Age: 18

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Stays away from others, bitter. He seems to have no emotions, always cold as a stone. 

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He grew up in a brutal home, his mother killed his father, and abused him. He would get beaten until he bled, often getting knocked out. Since then, he has a high tolerance for pain. It seems like nothing hurts him.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Joseph Fyre

Rank: Warrior

Age: 16

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werepanther

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Mysterious, hard, merciless.

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He lost his arm when he was little, while fighting a bear. His arm was replaced with a titanium steel mechanical arm. 

Other: none.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Trevor Hawke

Rank: Warrior/Bounty hunter

Age: 23

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: Tall, very muscular. He is very handsome, yet fearsome.

Personality: Very kind, honorable, has a lot of patiencecaring, aways helping others.

Mate/Crush: He kind of likes Kalista, but he hates the fact that she is spoiled.

History: He grew up at the Kimdar Training School. He was an orphan, and grew up with his brother.

Other: Darin is his brother.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Darin Hawke

Rank: Warrior

Age: 24

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Harsh, uncaring, merciless. He is the opposite of his brother.

Mate/Crush: None.

History: Same as Trevor's.

Other: Trevor is his brother.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Caspian Marito

Rank: Sailor/Warrior

Age: 25

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Tall, handsome, muscular. His wavy, white mane and fur makes his startling blue eyes stand out.

Personality: Very kind, but tough from years of being at sea. He never lets weakness show.

Mate/Crush: None really, because he's usually out at sea.

History: He grew up in Kimdar Training School, but he became a sailor instead of an official warrior.

Other: none.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Jesse Baros

Rank: Warrior

Age: 13

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Tall, lean, his right eye is covered by a cloth because of a large scar.

Personality: Kind, but tough. He shows potential to be a great general when he grows up.

Mate/Crush: None, he thinks that girls are "yucky".

History: He is being raised by his grandfather, Sparta, as he has already completed his warrior training.

Other: Sparta Baros is his grandfather. Jacob Garros is his best friend. He has been called a child prodigy because of his superior fighting skills.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Sparta Baros

Rank: Warrior-retired

Age: 58

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Powerful, large, fearsome. He stands at a towering 6'11, and can strike fear into the heart of even the bravest warrior. A large scar goes from his hairline, across his eye, and to his cheek. Even though he is retired, he always wears his armor.

Personality: Can seem harsh and uncaring, but he really is nice. He thinks things through, and never acts rashly.

Mate/Crush: Dead.

History: He doesn't like to talk about it.

Other: Jesse is his grandson. He is pretty wealthy, and tends to spoil his grandson sometimes.  But teaches Jesse that for every treat, he has to train for an hour.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Troy Garros

Rank: Warrior

Age: 32

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Harsh at times, caring, stern. He won't tolerate disrespect.

Mate/Crush: His wife was exiled for treason.

History: He became a warrior when he was 15, and never looked back. His past was troubled, he grew up in a poor home, with little water and less food. He was the eldest of 5, and had to take care of his younger siblings when his parents died. All of his siblings either ran away from his strict rules, or died of sickness.

Other: Jacob Garros is his son.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Preston "Romeo" Feris

Rank: Villager

Age: 22

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Flirty. He likes to try to use his good looks to get out of trouble.

Mate/Crush: Any beautiful girl.

History: He never talks about it.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Not enough information, just because he never talks about it doesn't mean he doesn't have a history at all.

 

 

Name: Jacob Garros

Rank: Warrior-in-training

Age: 14

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Tall, lanky, he has a short, curly brown mane and brown eyes.

Personality: Even though he is popular with the girls, he prefers to focus on his training. He believes that there will be time for girls once he older, and has completed his training.

Mate/Crush: None.

History: He is growing up normally, except for the fact that his mother was exiled for treason against the Alphas.

Other: Troy Garros is his father. Jesse Baros is his best friend.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Ethan Drakus

Rank: Warrior

Age: 38

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Anthro Dragon

Appearance: Formidable. See pic.

Personality: Hard-hearted, cold-blooded, ruthless. He cares about no one.

Mate/Crush: None

History: He came to New Moon soon after his warrior training was complete.

Other: Spikes grow in his knuckles, and he is not afraid to harm anyone.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Molly

Rank: Warrior

Age: 17

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werefox

Appearance: Look at her pic

Personality: Shes sweet and shy, but can be violent and enjoys fighting

Mate/Crush: None

History: She doesnt like to talk about it

Other: None

Pic: 

Username: CochinBrahmaLover

 

 

Name: Rakan (his nickname is Insanity)

Rank: He was a warrior before he went mad.

Age: Unknown

Species: Werewolf

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Insane, random.

Mate/Crush: None

History: No one knows for sure, but some say that he ate a toxic plant, causing the insanity. He wandered into New Moon after he was insane.

Other: None

Pic: 

Username: LitteLady98

 

 

 

 

 

 

Places and distances:

 

Safe Haven - It's location is only known by the Alphas. 

 

Daktia City - A big city near the ocean, they often trade fish and shells for meat and furs.

 

Dakarria - A big city in the heart of the tribe, they often trade with Daktia City.

 

Haedarr - The Capital, impregnable, and safe.

Nothing is impregnable, there is always a way

 

Kimdar Training School - A stone, impregnable fortress that houses the children until they graduate. 

 

Lost Canyon - The place where traitors and criminals are sent. It is impossible to find one's way out of the giant, maze-like canyon. 

 

Elder's Peak - The place where important meetings and ceremonies are held.

 

Dead Wolf's End - The place where judgement is dealt to a traitor/criminal. A thin line goes from the End to Lost Canyon, and the Entrance can only be opened from the outside.

 

 

 

 

Distances:

 

 

Dakarria to Haedarr - 207 miles, 3-5 days.

 

Dakarria to Kimdar Training School - 6 miles, 3 hours.

 

Daktia City to Dakarria - 400 miles, 10 days.

 

Haedarr to Dakarria - 70 miles, 3 days.

 

Haedarr to Daktia City - 470 miles, 13 days.

 

Haedarr to Kimdar Training School - Kimdar Training School is right next to Haedarr.

 

Daktia City to Kimdar Training School - 490 miles, 15 days.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Herbs and uses/Illnesses:

 

http://wolvhenworld.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=ttk&action=display&thread=14


Overall this RP needs some work. The idea is there, but you need to expand on it and make it better. You have a lot of characters, but most of them are pretty slapped together with not a lot of thought put into them. Think quality, not quantity. Good luck!

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Originally Posted by HollyBird24 View Post

A mysterious disease has wiped out the human race. The few survivors are mutated. They are now werewolves, werecats, werefoxes, and a few shapeshifters. It has been over 3,000 years since then, and now the planet is alive again. There are many Creatures now. They live in harmony together as one tribe. All are lead by the Alphas, the Alphas take care of any major problems. Police take care of other problems. 

The first thing I want to suggest is to make your front page more attractive. Theres very little color and it looks messy and disorganized. If you look at the front page of The Story of my Life or Avalon, the front page has color and its well organized. This story seems very repetative, I feel like I've seen it before. You already had a werewolf/werecat roleplay which died off, this idea is very similar, why not trying something different? Unique? I do see some potential in this, but you need to develop the story more. This just seems very thrown together with not a lot of thought put into it.

 

 

New Moon was the first tribe that included all of the different Creatures, first led by Kidar I (Omri's ancestor.) , over 3 thousand years ago.

 

 

 

 

Rules: 

 

Do NOT RP unless I have approved of your form!

Keep any RP fights realistic, you cannot hit/miss everytime!

Keep any RL fights in PMs!

If you don't like the RP, then don't post.

If you have nothing nice to say, then don't post.

Have fun! frow.gif

Your rules are very basic and not very specific. This is just me, but I am not a fan of the first rule. It may be your thread, but you have little say in who can and who cannot post on it. For the third rule, you should spell out "real life", too many abbreviations is confusing. The last two rules I really don't like, if I were a new user considering joining this RP, those two rules would really turn me off. They are very unwelcoming.

 

Ranks:

 

Alpha male (Taken)

Alpha female (Taken)

Beta male (Open)

Beta female (Open)

Heir [will be Alpha when the previous Alpha dies] (Reserved)

General of the Army (Taken)

Warrior (Unlimited)

Upper Mystic [Uses magic, and teaches the healers] (Only 5)

Lesser Mystic [Uses magic, but has less powers than an Upper Mystic] (Only 10)

Police Chief (Open)

Police Officer (Unlimited)

Bounty hunter (9 places left)

Healer (Up to 20)

Assistant Healer (Unlimited)

Head Prison guards (9 spaces left)

Guard (Unlimited)

Farmer (Unlimited)

Rancher (Unlimited) [A rancher raises cattle and other sorts of food for the Tribe]

Villager (Unlimited)

I like the thought you put into creating all these ranks, but too many ranks can be confusing on an RP. The farmers/ranchers/villagers can all be combined into one rank, same with the head guards and guards. I don't see a need for betas or so many mystics.

 

Form:

 

Name:

Rank:

Age:

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.):

Appearance:

Personality:

Mate/Crush:

History:

Other:

Pic:

Username:

I wouldn't have the mate/crush space, when people are first joining they won't have a mate/crush unless its another character RPed by the same player.

 

 

 

Characters:

 

 

Name: Omri McCartney

Rank: Alpha Male

Age: 25

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: Tall, muscular, handsome. He is bigger than most.

Personality: Kind, wise, would die for his Tribe, fearless, compassionate.

Mate/Crush: Viridi

History: His family have been the Alphas ever since the Humans were wiped out. He was taught to honor the ancient ways, and ask the spirits of his ancestors for help if he needed it.

Other: Is 10x stronger than most of the other werewolves. When angered, his claws sharpen and can become tipped with poison.

Pic:

Username: LittleLady98

Definantly a Gary Sue. This character is large, 10x muscular, kind, wise, fearless, compassionate, poison tipped claws etc. Not very interesting.

 

 

Name: Viridi

Rank: Alpha Female (If Availiable if not then a warrior)

Age: 17

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Personality: Very calming and nice. She is fearless and brave. She believes in peace.

Pic: 

Username: IMMASHEIK

Mary Sue. Not nearly enough information, especially since this character is important (the alpha female).

 

Name: Eric Kingsman

Rank: Warrior

Age: 22

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Weretiger

Appearance: See pics

Personality: Fearless, brave, caring, merciful.

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He grew up in New Moon, and was one of the best when it came to his fighting skills. He never really knew his parents, because they dropped him off at Kimdar Training school when he was very young.

Other: Can do a little bit of air bending. Is close friends with the Alphas.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Gary Sue

 

Name: Diana Sperling

Rank: Assistant Healer

Age: 20

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Very sweet, caring. Firm with her patients.

Mate/Crush: None yet.

History: She was the only daughter of an Upper Mystic, and was trained in healing. She didn't attend Kimdar Training school because she didn't want to be a warrior.

Other: Has a natural gift for healing.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

 

Name: Marcus Remini

Rank: Head Prison Guard

Age: 32

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werebear

Appearance: See-pic

Personality: Harsh, can get angered easily, is nice only to the alphas

Mate/Crush: Unknown

History: He has always been alone, no one ever speaks to him which caused his anti-social behavior.

Other: He is skilled in hand-to-hand combat.

Pic: 

Username: armdchicken

 

Name: Maddie Cooper

Rank: Villager

Age: 21

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): werefox

Appearance: See Pic

Personality: Cunning, she doesn't talk much, and she can be nice when it benefits her.

Mate/Crush: Unknown

History: Her parents were killed and she was living off the streets. She had to steal to live.

Other: She is very good at stealing things and is always trying to steal.

Pic: 

Username: armdchicken

 

 

Name: Wynona Marquis

Rank: Army General

Age: 33

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werecow (( rofl. ))

Appearance: Although she is built like a tank, and stands at a towering 6'9, she still possesses some feminine beauty and charm in her kind green eyes, and flowing mane. She wears heavy battle armour.

Personality: Headstrong and demanding, will not allow anyone or anything to get in her way. She is so loyal to her tribe that she would die for it. She is, however, easily angered. Especially if disobeyed.

Mate/Crush: None at the moment.

History: She lived in a tribe of her type that lived much like Native Americans. After growing older and succeeding in her warrior training, she left in search of a new form of life.

Other: N/A

Pic: 

Username: Zinnia-Hen

 

 

Name: Seth Ramis

Rank: Warrior

Age: 35

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Minotaur

Appearance: Extremely large, very muscular, and surprisingly handsome. He is at least 7'5'' tall. His dusty grey fur is usually covered by armor. He always carries his ax with him.

Personality: Tough, but kind. He would die before giving up in a fight. 

Mate/Crush: He would never admit it, but he has a crush on Wynona.

History: The only thing anyone knows is that he was left on the doorstep of the training school. He grew up there, and was the strongest student. 

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Gary Sue

 

Name: Kalista Maldives V of Whitebluff

Rank: Villager

Age: 18

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See picture

Personality: A bit of a spoiled, overly feminine brat.

Mate/Crush: None at the time.

History: Kalista grew up far away in a small, secluded kingdom as a Princess. Eventually, she was kicked out by the court for being an immature tyrant. She is now seeking refuge with the New Moon tribe.

Other: She often uses her attractive appearance as an excuse.

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Username: Zinnia-Hen

 

Name: Sir Alexander Uenda of Whitebluff

Rank: Villager

Age: 27

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Weretiger

Appearance: Some say he's a little boy trapped in a manly-man's body. He is quite slim.

Personality: Nervous, always wishing to please Kalista and the Alphas. Quite the coward as well.

Mate/Crush: He only has eyes for Kalista, whom he serves. Though they are not mates, he has a large amount of love for her. Alexander simply does not want to admit it, as he knows the woman he serves isn't interested in him.

History: He lived in the same kingdom as Kalista, and came with her when she was banished.

Other: N/A

Pic: 

Username: Zinnia-Hen

 

 

Name: Jack Farley

Rank: Rancher/Villager

Age: 24

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Anthro Horse

Appearance: Tall, rugged handsome looks, muscular, and pretty large.

Personality: Kind, caring, firm. He would make a great warrior, but he doesn't like to fight.

Mate/Crush: None yet.

History: He grew up in New Moon. He was an orphan, but didn't let his hard life stop him from becoming a wealthy rancher.

Other: Volunteers to help others.

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Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Jessica Glade

Rank: Villager

Age: 21

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Anthro Horse

Appearance: Very beautiful, tall, slender.

Personality: Very sweet, kind, caring, and lovable.

Mate/Crush: None yet.

History: She was raised normally in the valley with her people, but a sickness swept through, ans almost everyone in her village died. She  escaped before catching the sickness, and came to New Moon.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Mary Sue

 

Name: Kenai Vanas

Rank: Warrior

Age: 17

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Very quiet, never says much.

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He was a rebel before going to the training school. He didn't listen to anyone.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Not enough information

 

Name: Shane Havan

Rank: Warrior

Age: 18

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Stays away from others, bitter. He seems to have no emotions, always cold as a stone. 

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He grew up in a brutal home, his mother killed his father, and abused him. He would get beaten until he bled, often getting knocked out. Since then, he has a high tolerance for pain. It seems like nothing hurts him.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Joseph Fyre

Rank: Warrior

Age: 16

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werepanther

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Mysterious, hard, merciless.

Mate/Crush: None yet

History: He lost his arm when he was little, while fighting a bear. His arm was replaced with a titanium steel mechanical arm. 

Other: none.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Trevor Hawke

Rank: Warrior/Bounty hunter

Age: 23

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: Tall, very muscular. He is very handsome, yet fearsome.

Personality: Very kind, honorable, has a lot of patiencecaring, aways helping others.

Mate/Crush: He kind of likes Kalista, but he hates the fact that she is spoiled.

History: He grew up at the Kimdar Training School. He was an orphan, and grew up with his brother.

Other: Darin is his brother.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Darin Hawke

Rank: Warrior

Age: 24

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werewolf

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Harsh, uncaring, merciless. He is the opposite of his brother.

Mate/Crush: None.

History: Same as Trevor's.

Other: Trevor is his brother.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Caspian Marito

Rank: Sailor/Warrior

Age: 25

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Tall, handsome, muscular. His wavy, white mane and fur makes his startling blue eyes stand out.

Personality: Very kind, but tough from years of being at sea. He never lets weakness show.

Mate/Crush: None really, because he's usually out at sea.

History: He grew up in Kimdar Training School, but he became a sailor instead of an official warrior.

Other: none.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Jesse Baros

Rank: Warrior

Age: 13

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Tall, lean, his right eye is covered by a cloth because of a large scar.

Personality: Kind, but tough. He shows potential to be a great general when he grows up.

Mate/Crush: None, he thinks that girls are "yucky".

History: He is being raised by his grandfather, Sparta, as he has already completed his warrior training.

Other: Sparta Baros is his grandfather. Jacob Garros is his best friend. He has been called a child prodigy because of his superior fighting skills.

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Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Sparta Baros

Rank: Warrior-retired

Age: 58

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Powerful, large, fearsome. He stands at a towering 6'11, and can strike fear into the heart of even the bravest warrior. A large scar goes from his hairline, across his eye, and to his cheek. Even though he is retired, he always wears his armor.

Personality: Can seem harsh and uncaring, but he really is nice. He thinks things through, and never acts rashly.

Mate/Crush: Dead.

History: He doesn't like to talk about it.

Other: Jesse is his grandson. He is pretty wealthy, and tends to spoil his grandson sometimes.  But teaches Jesse that for every treat, he has to train for an hour.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Troy Garros

Rank: Warrior

Age: 32

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Harsh at times, caring, stern. He won't tolerate disrespect.

Mate/Crush: His wife was exiled for treason.

History: He became a warrior when he was 15, and never looked back. His past was troubled, he grew up in a poor home, with little water and less food. He was the eldest of 5, and had to take care of his younger siblings when his parents died. All of his siblings either ran away from his strict rules, or died of sickness.

Other: Jacob Garros is his son.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Preston "Romeo" Feris

Rank: Villager

Age: 22

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: See pic.

Personality: Flirty. He likes to try to use his good looks to get out of trouble.

Mate/Crush: Any beautiful girl.

History: He never talks about it.

Other: None.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

Not enough information, just because he never talks about it doesn't mean he doesn't have a history at all.

 

 

Name: Jacob Garros

Rank: Warrior-in-training

Age: 14

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werelion

Appearance: Tall, lanky, he has a short, curly brown mane and brown eyes.

Personality: Even though he is popular with the girls, he prefers to focus on his training. He believes that there will be time for girls once he older, and has completed his training.

Mate/Crush: None.

History: He is growing up normally, except for the fact that his mother was exiled for treason against the Alphas.

Other: Troy Garros is his father. Jesse Baros is his best friend.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Ethan Drakus

Rank: Warrior

Age: 38

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Anthro Dragon

Appearance: Formidable. See pic.

Personality: Hard-hearted, cold-blooded, ruthless. He cares about no one.

Mate/Crush: None

History: He came to New Moon soon after his warrior training was complete.

Other: Spikes grow in his knuckles, and he is not afraid to harm anyone.

Pic: 

Username: LittleLady98

 

 

Name: Molly

Rank: Warrior

Age: 17

Species (Shapeshifter, werewolf, werecat, werefox, etc.): Werefox

Appearance: Look at her pic

Personality: Shes sweet and shy, but can be violent and enjoys fighting

Mate/Crush: None

History: She doesnt like to talk about it

Other: None

Pic: 

Username: CochinBrahmaLover

 

 

Name: Rakan (his nickname is Insanity)

Rank: He was a warrior before he went mad.

Age: Unknown

Species: Werewolf

Appearance: See pic

Personality: Insane, random.

Mate/Crush: None

History: No one knows for sure, but some say that he ate a toxic plant, causing the insanity. He wandered into New Moon after he was insane.

Other: None

Pic: 

Username: LitteLady98

 

 

 

 

 

 

Places and distances:

 

Safe Haven - It's location is only known by the Alphas. 

 

Daktia City - A big city near the ocean, they often trade fish and shells for meat and furs.

 

Dakarria - A big city in the heart of the tribe, they often trade with Daktia City.

 

Haedarr - The Capital, impregnable, and safe.

Nothing is impregnable, there is always a way

 

Kimdar Training School - A stone, impregnable fortress that houses the children until they graduate. 

 

Lost Canyon - The place where traitors and criminals are sent. It is impossible to find one's way out of the giant, maze-like canyon. 

 

Elder's Peak - The place where important meetings and ceremonies are held.

 

Dead Wolf's End - The place where judgement is dealt to a traitor/criminal. A thin line goes from the End to Lost Canyon, and the Entrance can only be opened from the outside.

 

 

 

 

Distances:

 

 

Dakarria to Haedarr - 207 miles, 3-5 days.

 

Dakarria to Kimdar Training School - 6 miles, 3 hours.

 

Daktia City to Dakarria - 400 miles, 10 days.

 

Haedarr to Dakarria - 70 miles, 3 days.

 

Haedarr to Daktia City - 470 miles, 13 days.

 

Haedarr to Kimdar Training School - Kimdar Training School is right next to Haedarr.

 

Daktia City to Kimdar Training School - 490 miles, 15 days.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Herbs and uses/Illnesses:

 

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Overall this RP needs some work. The idea is there, but you need to expand on it and make it better. You have a lot of characters, but most of them are pretty slapped together with not a lot of thought put into them. Think quality, not quantity. Good luck!

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lol

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hi all

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Ahoy.

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how it going? my butt is sore :P

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me? sorry cant holly *sigh* i would like to, but i am not Rping eight now :P so no go

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