Calling all grammar nazis

Discussion in 'Random Ramblings' started by hippiechickadee, Dec 30, 2014.

  1. hippiechickadee

    hippiechickadee Out Of The Brooder

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    Or people who just want to help out :D

    I just posted my webpage. It's meant for my small local community/village. I am not tell anyone about it until all the kinks have been worked out.

    I was hoping for some test webpage surfers to find those kinks!

    Could you scour the page and let me know what you think, how it functions, and any spelling/grammar mistakes I've made (I know there has to be some!) This is still very much under construction!

    www.LaurasOrganicEggs.com

    Things I'm looking for:

    *It was made with a mac- if you don't have a mac, how did the site look and work?

    *If you found spelling/grammar mistakes, what page(s) and what were they?

    *Did you like the page?

    *Would you be interested in the page as an egg buyer?

    *What didn't you like?

    *Do you have any FAQ that others might have that I could address before the page gets announced (being a none chicken person that is)?

    *Anything suggestions?






    -One mistake found by a friend: Belina's page says "He" instead of "Her"
     
  2. N F C

    N F C doo be doo be doo Premium Member

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    I looked over your webpage and was impressed with the photos and descriptions of your chickens. The page where you can click on an egg and then see who laid it was fun. Right off hand, I didn't see any typos. Love your egg cartons! On the FAQ, you may want to add something about how free range eggs are considered more nutritional than commercial/store-bought eggs (here's a link for more info:
    http://www.motherearthnews.com/real-food/free-range-eggs-zmaz07onzgoe.aspx#axzz3NOecNwhK

    Oh, and I'm a non-Mac user and the webpage worked ok for me.

    Good job, hope it helps you sell lots of eggs!
     
  3. hippiechickadee

    hippiechickadee Out Of The Brooder

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    Thank you for your feedback!! And for the link- that's a wonderful idea to add. :) I really appreciate it
     
  4. N F C

    N F C doo be doo be doo Premium Member

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    Good luck! [​IMG]
     
  5. MeepBeep

    MeepBeep Chillin' With My Peeps

    I don't have time to actually go over it in detail, but as a long time web designer, I will suggest you consider the page sizes, up/down scrolling should be limited on most pages... When the people open a page almost all info on that page should pop on the main screen, scrolling up down should mostly be limited to extended content not directory pages or home pages...

    Also consider dropping the unnecessary directory to make the URL cleaner...

    http://www.laurasorganiceggs.com/Lauras_Organic_Eggs/Meet_the_Flock.html

    And call me old school, but I try to keep all URLs full lower case, because unlike 'Windows' computers *nix systems differentiate case and you will get 404 errors...

    For example, in the bellow I simply lower cased the E in eggs and now the URL is broke... Yes most people will cut and paste and or just follow shortcuts, but not all...

    http://www.laurasorganiceggs.com/Lauras_Organic_eggs/Meet_the_Flock.html
     
  6. matt44644

    matt44644 Chillin' With My Peeps

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    Your site looks nice.However unless your certified you can't label them as organic.

    How Are Organic Products Overseen?
    The National Organic Program regulates all organic crops, livestock, and agricultural products certified to the United States Department of Agriculture (USDA) organic standards. Organic certification agencies inspect and verify that organic farmers, ranchers, distributors, processors, and traders are complying with the USDA organic regulations. USDA conducts audits and ensures that the more than 90 organic certification agencies operating around the world are properly certifying organic products. In addition, USDA conducts investigations and conducts enforcement activities to ensure all products labeled as organic meet the USDA organic regulations. In order to sell, label, or represent their products as organic, operations must follow all of the specifications set out by the USDA organic regulations.

    http://www.ams.usda.gov/AMSv1.0/ams...ogram&page=NOPConsumers&description=Consumers
     
  7. matt44644

    matt44644 Chillin' With My Peeps

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  8. donrae

    donrae Hopelessly Addicted Premium Member

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    On the page about winter management, second paragraph, you referred to their "waddles". Chicken have wattles.

    That's the only error I noticed on a read-through. I could agree with Meep about the scrolling, though. It was a little distracting. Overall, though, I think it's a nice site for a small egg seller.
     
  9. juliechick

    juliechick Transplanted Hillbilly

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    Nice website, very well done!. I worked as a proofreader, so I did see just a few little mistakes:

    Under Sweet and Sour "hair-like" should be hyphenated. "Hens" in the second paragraph doesn't need an apostrophe. Under Buying eggs "into" should be 2 words "in to".

    Like donrae said, Chickens have "wattles" and ducks "waddle" when they walk. :)

    Casserole is a Barred Plymouth Rock. I know almost everyone just says "Barred Rock", but the actual breed name is Plymouth Rock. Barred is her color /variety.
     
  10. hippiechickadee

    hippiechickadee Out Of The Brooder

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    I've fallen behind on this thread! Sorry about that guys!

    I really really appreciate the feedback! I'm making some corrections at this very moment for the things you caught.

    The waddle VS wattle thing really gave me a chuckle. DUH! hahaha I see it now that it's pointed out to me, completely over my head before :D
     

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