in black and white a story about a border collie

Discussion in 'Games, Jokes, and Fun!' started by ChickenRadio, Dec 1, 2011.

  1. ChickenRadio

    ChickenRadio Chillin' With My Peeps

    this is my first book so it might not be to detailed any way i hope you like it
     
  2. luvinmychickens

    luvinmychickens Chillin' With My Peeps

    Jun 15, 2011
    Ohio
    Quote:Through PM, I could be your personal reviser and give you tips. [​IMG] To see my writing, look for "I am no more than a battery hen" and also "Maizie's Life". [​IMG]
     
  3. ChickenRadio

    ChickenRadio Chillin' With My Peeps

    Quote:Through PM, I could be your personal reviser and give you tips. [​IMG] To see my writing, look for "I am no more than a battery hen" and also "Maizie's Life". [​IMG]

    i'm reading "Maizie's life" right now so far i like it [​IMG] [​IMG] [​IMG]
     
  4. luvinmychickens

    luvinmychickens Chillin' With My Peeps

    Jun 15, 2011
    Ohio
    Quote:Through PM, I could be your personal reviser and give you tips. [​IMG] To see my writing, look for "I am no more than a battery hen" and also "Maizie's Life". [​IMG]

    i'm reading "Maizie's life" right now so far i like it [​IMG] [​IMG] [​IMG]

    Thanks! [​IMG]
     
  5. luvinmychickens

    luvinmychickens Chillin' With My Peeps

    Jun 15, 2011
    Ohio
    Where's the chapter? [​IMG]
     
  6. ChickenRadio

    ChickenRadio Chillin' With My Peeps

    chapter 1


    Sam blaze Sara and I were sleeping when some humans came into the door. i woke up as big hands grabbed me. "shes a fine one" the tall man holding me said. "is she fierce?" another tall big handed man asked. "we need a guard dog"
    "she is a fierce one alright" the man holding me said. i lily growled to prove it. "well... okay"the other man said "we'll take her" the man holding me put me back in the box. "are you alright." Sam asked when i was in
    "yes i'm fine." i curled up and went back to sleep.
     
    Last edited: Dec 3, 2011
  7. ChickenRadio

    ChickenRadio Chillin' With My Peeps

    its short but i think it's good when it say's i it mean lily
     
    Last edited: Dec 1, 2011
  8. luvinmychickens

    luvinmychickens Chillin' With My Peeps

    Jun 15, 2011
    Ohio
    [​IMG] good! I'll PM you the edited version. [​IMG]
     
  9. ChickenRadio

    ChickenRadio Chillin' With My Peeps

    okay
     
  10. Dapplepony

    Dapplepony Chillin' With My Peeps

    Jul 19, 2010
    Sis, please us PUNCTUATION! It helps greatly.
     

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