Separate names with a comma.
Discussion in 'Chicken Breeders & Hatcheries' started by siamshirl, Aug 3, 2007.
I've only read the first paragraph but you might want to capitalize words like "I" and use complete sentences. Maybe get someone to go over your grammar too.
Oh, and by briefly looking at the paragraph under your intro, you'll have to site the places where you got the pictures and the descriptions as it is plagiarism if you don't. Using pictures of your own birds would also be a good idea to avoid legal problems on that part.
Nice template choice though!
And one more thing. Sound was a bit loud.
Those pictures are from http://www.mcmurrayhatchery.com/product/top_hat_assorted_chicken_eggs.html
and so are your descriptons:
So you shouldn't be using them as your own... you don't want you to get in trouble for that.
Silkiechicken covered the grammer and blatant plagiarism. Change
that before you get sued.
PLEASE LOSE THE MUSIC!!! Who is that, Enya? Ack.
Music on web sites slow them down and really annoy people.
You have a start but a lot of work to go. Worry about the content.
Don't worry about it being too pretty. Some of the best chicken
sites are rough looking but deliver what folks are looking for.
You asked for it to be rated...
ok i lost the music and fixed the piece about the picktures telling them i got them from welp hatchery will that fix the part about using those pictures and i sayed i got the ones for the eggs from mcmurray
Please learn how to use punctuation.
Oh, the thing about saying your are using their pictures. Since you want a business with it. You have to get their permission to be able to use it too. Sometimes getting permission to use a picture also requires you to pay them. I say it is best to get your own pictures.
Nice design, but like others mentioned, you need to fix the grammar. I agree that you should take your own photos. I think you have an eye for it anyway, so why borrow someone else's?
ok im deleting all the photos that arent my own and putting my own on tomorrow thank you for all you advice is there anything else?
im 16 years old so i dont know too much about fixing a website up so anything you can give me advice wise helps alot
Do they not teach you how to use capitalization and punctuation in school? When you write papers for your English or History classes, do you not have to use capital letters, periods, and commas?