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'Course I'll look at it.It's not a RP, But I was wondering if you could take the time to check out my new Story? I'm not sure if its any good so I need opinions, if you could, it would be great.
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'Course I'll look at it.It's not a RP, But I was wondering if you could take the time to check out my new Story? I'm not sure if its any good so I need opinions, if you could, it would be great.
Okay. What a lovely training session that must have been. Still, she wouldn't kick the gun, because you need to be good to the gun. (Personally, I would be ready to go down fighting. LOL)Ill look through it for the mistakes.
And Bree wasn't upset by their deaths, because they had been trained in the past so if a situation like this arose, they would of course feel sadness, but if they had a mission to complete, they would just pass on by, and however wrong that may seem, it plays out later in my story, and as for the gun, Bree doesn't see a point in keeping it when she's up against ten soldiers pointing guns at her, it wouldn't make sense.
Quote:And of course, that is your opinion, but this is how i want to see my story play out. And I will of course have to make changes, but I am satisfied with it thus far.Okay. What a lovely training session that must have been. Still, she wouldn't kick the gun, because you need to be good to the gun. (Personally, I would be ready to go down fighting. LOL)
Good for you!And of course, that is your opinion, but this is how i want to see my story play out. And I will of course have to make changes, but I am satisfied with it thus far.
Sure! Give me a few days to work on it, and I'll post it here for you guys to critique. I'm going to model most of the ranks and rules off of my old RP, Run With the Pack, but I have to think through the introduction and plot first.
It's been a few days, Orps!
Well, I am no grammar freak but you need to capitalize the I's because that is a Person, out of a Person Place thing or Idea. Just letting you know!Hey Gertrude, could you take a look at this? And could you correct any grammar mistakes, and tell me where i made them, and could you tell me what you think of it? I figured, i might as well try it, it's been on my mind to make for a while.