Dawning of war ~ RP

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Joushua stood up on shaky legs he saw another bomb drop and made a run for it the bomb was to far to do any real damage just the hot air knocking him over as he let out a mangled cry.
 
MollyBrownROX13 said:
Quote: ( I'm not trying to hurt you, dear, I'm just trying to help you improve your RP. I'm sorry if I did offend you. Pearl Harbor was something very real, and that needs to be acknowledged. To create a realistic RP but miss several points is one thing, but turning something horribly bloody and tragic into something fun for the sake of your own enjoyment is another.

If you want to find something to criticize about any of my RPs, then feel free to. If you post it on the internet, heck, if you say anything in real life, then be ready for a bit of constructive criticism. Just be sure to remember there is a fine line between bashing and criticizing, however. )
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Before Noah could react, the bomb hit, sending him flying and crashing into a wall that once was a building. He hit the wall with a sickening crack in the head. His vision went dizzy and everything faded into black.
 
Zinnia-Hen said:
( I'm not trying to hurt you, dear, I'm just trying to help you improve your RP. I'm sorry if I did offend you. Pearl Harbor was something very real, and that needs to be acknowledged. To create a realistic RP but miss several points is one thing, but turning something horribly bloody and tragic into something fun for the sake of your own enjoyment is another.

If you want to find something to criticize about any of my RPs, then feel free to. If you post it on the internet, heck, if you say anything in real life, then be ready for a bit of constructive criticism. Just be sure to remember there is a fine line between bashing and criticizing, however. )
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:/ not very constructive....
 
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Bluebee said:
(Mk! :D )

Eliza screamed again, her screams muted by another explosion.
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Joushua stumbled back to his feet and spotted Eliza he ran towards her and gtabbed her arm yanking her towards him starting to run. "WE CANT STAY HERE!" He yelled.
 

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