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[equinehugger3]

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Nah, I won't get published for a long while. This is more for feedback.

Awesome.

Thanks!

 

[equinehugger3]

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It's AMAZING, though

 

[NixNoodleNumbat]

Double post!

 

[NixNoodleNumbat]

Something I wrote for my SP characters:

Sparrow and Eagle lay in the forest.
"So, I heard about you and Chickadee." Eagle said.
"Yes. I heard about you and Wren." Sparrow.
"It won't happen anytime soon. I love Wren, but she's not ready for a relationship. Anyways, what is Chickadee like? I haven't met her." Eagle.
"Oh, Eagle, She is wonderful!" Sparrow.
"I remember when Opossum used to say that about Emu." Eagle.
"I miss Opossum." Sparrow.
"Yeah, he was the nicest of your brothers." Eagle.
"Much nicer than Wallaby or Thyclane." Sparrow.
"I sometimes wonder what happened to your family." Eagle.
"Our family. You may as well be my brother." Sparrow.
"I suppose. Your father always went to great lengths to remind me I was no son of his." Eagle.
"My father was a terrible he-wolf." Sparrow.
"He sure was." Eagle.
"And yet, I find myself missing him. Just like I miss them all." Sparrow blinked away a tear.
"At least we have each other, brother." Eagle licked Sparrow's ear.
"Why hello, brother." A jet black wolf, larger than Sparrow yet smaller than Eagle, appeared from the bushes. "We have a lot to catch up on."
"Thyclane." Sparrow's eyes widened.
"I have found you. And I'm here to make your life hell." Thyclane smiled evilly.
"So nice to see you again, especially since you teamed up with father and murdered mother." Eagle said sarcastically.
"Panda was not your mother, Ibis was never your father, neither wanted you!" Thyclane shouted, attempting to scratch Eagle, but Sparrow pushed him back.
"Panda was as much Eagle's mother than she was your's." Sparrow said. "Why did you come back?"
"Various reasons. But first, let's get our story sorted. We all know that Eagle came to the family because his parents were killed." Thyclane.
"Panda accepted me into the family, Ibis, however did not." Eagle.
"Panda tried to keep Eagle safe, but Thyclane, Wallaby and Ibis decided to murder her, as she was not letting them chase off Eagle." Sparrow continued.
"After Panda died, Ibis became worse. Sparrow and I ran away and became loners, until recently." Eagle said.
"And I went on to become leader of our pack, until my mate was murdered by Emu. I became an outcast among my pack, so I left. And now I'm here to join SnowPack." Thyclane finished. "And you two shall pay, as well as anyone close to you. Especially Chickadee and Wren."
"How did you know?" Sparrow.
"Did you really expect I wasn't eavesdropping?"
"Please, don't hurt them. Chickadee and Wren don't deserve this." Eagle.
"Nor did my mate, but she's long gone." Thyclane left.
"Oh dear." Eagle looked at Sparrow worriedly.

 

[tinychicky]

these are great

did anyone read mine?

 

[Dutchgirl]

Here's a short bit I wrote about something that happened to me when I was a little kid:

I gripped the library books tightly, feeling their smooth, shiny dust jackets. They were a bit sweaty from my holding them for a time.

The cool air brushed past my face and I leaned against the cold metal bookshelf. Only a few feet from me stood another like it, stretching nearly to the ceiling. It was lined with books of all colors and sizes. Quiet rustles and scratches of books being removed from shelves sounded, as well as the soft flunk-flunk of the pages being flipped as someone skimmed through a thick book.
I saw the woman in front of me only vaguely, waiting for the opportune time to speak. My mother had deep brown hair and was of medium height, perhaps a bit taller.

She was starting to look up. I spoke. "Mommy, can I check these books out?" I held out the few assorted books I had.

Now, if I had taken the time to study this woman more closely, I would've been able to tell that I had made a mistake, but I was too late. The woman looked up. "Are you looking for your mom, honey?" Her face was young and beautiful, with no pair of round glasses perched on her nose like my mother had. Her makeup was put on neatly. I guessed she was probably a student from the town's university, but I couldn't be sure.

I nodded, blushed deeply, and turned away as quickly as I could. A muffled phone conversation between the short, dark, round-faced woman at the desk and an unknown client on the end of the line could be heard faintly in the background, but I paid little attention. I was concentrating on finding my mother, who turned out to be standing two bookshelves over, and, chuckling nervously, asking if I could check out the books I held.

 

[FarmCoe]

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That has happened to me before... You're a great writer, BTW.

 

[Dutchgirl]

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That has happened to me before... You're a great writer, BTW.

Thanks!

 

[chickendiva25]

Alright, I am writing something really awesome, in my mind anyways. I don't normally write like this, but I thought I would try it since I am feeling rather like it. EVIL!!! Yes, I feel evilish at the moment. I decided to write something down, something random I must add. If you want to see it, I'll PM it to you when I'm done, still don't know how gory it will be.....

 

[chickendiva25]

(Alright, by "gory" I mean, Blood. Thats pretty much it. I'm not one to get really graphic....)