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[Yep I Talk To Chickens]

@WallyBirdie Ok sorry it took so long but here are some of my drawings. The lesson will be down below:
Step one draw a square/rectangle to the left or right of your page not in the center.

Step 2 draw a roof it could be a triangle or a barn type roof

Step 3 draw a rectangle or square attached to the first squares

Step 4 finish the roof

Step add light details make sure you can fix them up later.

Step 6 your not done yet but your getting there add shading details and color.

 

[WallyBirdie]

@WallyBirdie Ok sorry it took so long but here are some of my drawings. The lesson will be down below:
Step one draw a square/rectangle to the left or right of your page not in the center.View attachment 2281766
Step 2 draw a roof it could be a triangle or a barn type roofView attachment 2281767
Step 3 draw a rectangle or square attached to the first squaresView attachment 2281770
Step 4 finish the roofView attachment 2281772
Step add light details make sure you can fix them up later.View attachment 2281773
Step 6 your not done yet but your getting there add shading details and color.

I LOVE YOUR BUILDING DRAWING PROCESS, ANIMALS, AND PAINTING! It's all really good and your instructions are helpful! I tend to slap a big square in the middle or side and say "pretend that's a building."

 

[Yep I Talk To Chickens]

I LOVE YOUR BUILDING DRAWING PROCESS, ANIMALS, AND PAINTING! It's all really good and your instructions are helpful! I tend to slap a big square in the middle or side and say "pretend that's a building."

Thank you!
Lol I ised to be like that. Then I tried many different ways to draw buildings and found this easier and very effective.

 

[WallyBirdie]

Thank you!
Lol I ised to be like that. Then I tried many different ways to draw buildings and found this easier and very effective.

I'll use your technique next time I do a background! It's very helpful!

 

[Yep I Talk To Chickens]

I'll use your technique next time I do a background! It's very helpful!

Thank you!

 

[Yep I Talk To Chickens]

I dont know how this summery is I just whipped it together. Tell me what you think. Be honest if you think its not that good tell me how I can improve. Thank you.
Summary:
Niko was just a normal 40s house wife in Japan. Well thats what everyone thought. She was really a women in love with a man that wasn't her husband. She is scared. She is more than anyone thinks. She is in love with a doctor named Oakley. While her husband was away at war she got pregnant with twin baby girls. But they were Oakleys children. She has to hide her afair from her twin daughters Hinata and Aoi. She thinks she is in as deep as she can go until the bombing happens. How will she survive and deal with the trauma. Find out in Love, Life, and HOPE!

 

[Yep I Talk To Chickens]

@WallyBirdie what do you think?

 

[WallyBirdie]

I dont know how this summery is I just whipped it together. Tell me what you think. Be honest if you think its not that good tell me how I can improve. Thank you.
Summary:
Niko was just a normal 40s house wife in Japan. Well thats what everyone thought. She was really a women in love with a man that wasn't her husband. She is scared. She is more than anyone thinks. She is in love with a doctor named Oakley. While her husband was away at war she got pregnant with twin baby girls. But they were Oakleys children. She has to hide her afair from her twin daughters Hinata and Aoi. She thinks she is in as deep as she can go until the bombing happens. How will she survive and deal with the trauma. Find out in Love, Life, and HOPE!

It sounds interesting and I really like the bold way you end it. It is good, but some word adjustment would make it more intriguing.
Like when you introduce Niko, to say what she appears and reiterate what people think, the sentences don't flow as well as they could. Read your work out loud and decide what sounds more interesting, and make adjustments as you go. You have a great idea and a good start. A little fine tuning will do wonders!
"Thought to be a normal housewife in Japan, Niko lived a life of secrecy, lies, fear, and love. An affair long hidden, two children born to another man... and then the bombing... Niko's life hasn't been normal in a long time."

Something like that maybe? Obviously, use your own words. But if you delay some details and use some adjectives, it makes it a bit more mysterious. Then people have to read to know what is going on.

 

[Yep I Talk To Chickens]

It sounds interesting and I really like the bold way you end it. It is good, but some word adjustment would make it more intriguing.
Like when you introduce Niko, to say what she appears and reiterate what people think, the sentences don't flow as well as they could. Read your work out loud and decide what sounds more interesting, and make adjustments as you go. You have a great idea and a good start. A little fine tuning will do wonders!
"Thought to be a normal housewife in Japan, Niko lived a life of secrecy, lies, fear, and love. An affair long hidden, two children born to another man... and then the bombing... Niko's life hasn't been normal in a long time."

Something like that maybe? Obviously, use your own words. But if you delay some details and use some adjectives, it makes it a bit more mysterious. Then people have to read to know what is going on.

You are so talented! I agree it wasn't ny best work. Thank you for your kind ways to improve.

 

[WallyBirdie]

You are so talented! I agree it wasn't ny best work. Thank you for your kind ways to improve.

Hey, ya got a great idea, so keep at it.
Also, it helps if you read various types of literature and find one that resonates well with you. It can help you see how sentence formatting and word use can make something more appealing.