Farm chatter

[ChickForLife]

Have I ever shown you guys my drawings bc I'm actually kinda proud of some of them and I'd like y'all to see them

No, I would love to see them! I have seen the horses and the goose though.

 

[SBFChickenGirl]

From a reader's standpoint: I Love your plotline, and how you were able to tie in enough background for everything to make sense while keeping it mysterious. I also like how you did a villain pOV, not a hero. I think that I could have used a bit more explanation on the nature of Shifter- what sort of powers, the origin of said powers, etc. At some points it seemed like Shifter was a common noun, not a name- describing some sort of creature, not being used as a title. Twist at the end was great, though for some reason I had been picturing our main character as female. Maybe a bit cliche, but the rest of the story that's anything but is able to balance it.

MC is female.
I didn't mention that, did I.
*facepalm*
I should definitely expand on the powers.

Especially right here: "She should be gaining consciousness sometime soon. I left my room..." To make them match more, I would have done: "She would be gaining consciousness sometime soon. I left my room...." or "She should be regaining consciousness sometime soon. I leave my room....."

I knew those sounded wrong.
I was working on something else on different tense and I got switched up.

I LOVE your adjectives. I also LOVE how you varied the sentence length and structure, which made for a smooth read. Your line breaks were great as well- they gave the right tone when you're reading it, and were great in demonstrating what was narration and what was more background that the character would have not been actively thinking of.

Thanks so much!!!

I will say that you forgot to indent when starting a new paragraph.

C/P from Google docs (made for writing) to BYC (for chatting about chickens) the formatting got all messed up LOL

Overall I think it's AMAZING!!!!!!!!

Thanks!!!!

Ok guys what should I draw?

A chicken? Some sort of mystical creature? Griffin?

 

[SBFChickenGirl]

Ok SBF you hearted this but didn't react at all to my post about your writing so now I'm slightly scared

Don't be, sorry. I forgot that I was writing out a post and had to come back and finish it LOL

Have I ever shown you guys my drawings bc I'm actually kinda proud of some of them and I'd like y'all to see them

YOU SHOULD

 

[ackie]

Whoa!!! I'd have a heart attack if that many girls were missing for me. Hopefully they're all good overnight! What kind of construction are you doing?

I mean there are definitely extra girls in the trees, I just cant count them appropriately. That sets my mind well enough at ease haha.

So... the barn is going to be turned into a stand alone living space (like an apartment type thing) so we are running electric and water to it... we rented a ditch witch to dig the trenches so the pipes will be low enough that the water lines wont freeze, and we figured since we had it, we may as well run some french drains because our soil does not drain well.

so the area right in front of the pens is a maze of open trenches atm

 

[black_cat]

MC is female.
I didn't mention that, did I.
By MC do you mean Silver or Shifter? Because I knew Shifter was female, but Shifter addressing silver as 'Father' gave me the impression that Shifter was male. You don't need to outright state gender- you could maybe have a newspaper title say it or have a henchperson say 'ma'am' or 'sir' to subtly give gender.

I should definitely expand on the powers.
I knew those sounded wrong.
I was working on something else on different tense and I got switched up.


Thanks so much!!!
Of course! It's great, much better than I could do
C/P from Google docs (made for writing) to BYC (for chatting about chickens) the formatting got all messed up LOL
Makes sense.
Thanks!!!!

A chicken? Some sort of mystical creature? Griffin?
My Tillie drawing didn't work out, so griffin it is.

 

[black_cat]

I mean there are definitely extra girls in the trees, I just cant count them appropriately. That sets my mind well enough at ease haha.

So... the barn is going to be turned into a stand alone living space (like an apartment type thing) so we are running electric and water to it... we rented a ditch witch to dig the trenches so the pipes will be low enough that the water lines wont freeze, and we figured since we had it, we may as well run some french drains because our soil does not drain well.

You lost me at the words ditch witch I'm DYING is it REALLY called a ditch witch this is HILARIOUS

 

[black_cat]

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^^That's an old one. Only posted because I like how I did the body shape on the cat. The wings are garbage.

^arm practice that I'm pretty happy with. I'm working on a realistic style of doing humans. I can't connect the arms to torsos, tho. That's too hard, apparently.

Chicken doodles.

^^ a true monstrosity.

Muscovy duck

This is my own hand. I'm pretty happy with this also.

^disproportionate alicorn. Originally a clydesdale horse that I thought looked magicky.

Clydesdale horse. I like this one.

A tiger from a while back. Surprisingly good considering all the other art form that time was awful.

 

[SBFChickenGirl]

Don't know how to quote this so yeah:
@black_cat said these words!

By MC do you mean Silver or Shifter? Because I knew Shifter was female, but Shifter addressing silver as 'Father' gave me the impression that Shifter was male. You don't need to outright state gender- you could maybe have a newspaper title say it or have a henchperson say 'ma'am' or 'sir' to subtly give gender.

My response
I need sleep too.
I meant that Shifter, the daughter is female. the MC, narrator of the story, is male.

 

[SBFChickenGirl]

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^^That's an old one. Only posted because I like how I did the body shape on the cat. The wings are garbage.
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^arm practice that I'm pretty happy with. I'm working on a realistic style of doing humans. I can't connect the arms to torsos, tho. That's too hard, apparently.
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Chicken doodles.
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^^ a true monstrosity.
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Muscovy duck
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This is my own hand. I'm pretty happy with this also.
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^disproportionate alicorn. Originally a clydesdale horse that I thought looked magicky.
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Clydesdale horse. I like this one.
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A tiger from a while back. Surprisingly good considering all the other art form that time was awful.

WOW!!!
I love the muscovy and the hand!!
Not an artist, myself, but I've heard that hands are hard to draw.

 

[black_cat]

Don't know how to quote this so yeah:
@black_cat said these words!

By MC do you mean Silver or Shifter? Because I knew Shifter was female, but Shifter addressing silver as 'Father' gave me the impression that Shifter was male. You don't need to outright state gender- you could maybe have a newspaper title say it or have a henchperson say 'ma'am' or 'sir' to subtly give gender.

My response
I need sleep too.
I meant that Shifter, the daughter is female. the MC, narrator of the story, is male.

You can quote using the reply button and deleting everything around it, but I have a feeling that's not the issue?
Ok, that's what I thought.
For personal interest, what kind of mask does Silver have? The kind that we wear now, or like a full scale, gas mask or welder's mask esque thing?