Kaybear1950
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I know of no other forum where this might be appropriate. 
I need an extra pair of eyes to look at my college entrance essay and see if it makes sense or if it is very rambly. I am jittery and having issues. I am just under 500 words. My initial undergraduate is not in Agriculture so my essay and references I sent out to my colleagues will be weighed heavily.
Prompt:
1. A personal essay that addresses your interest in the program, post-graduation intentions, learning expectations, and current involvement in agriculture
My Essay:
To whom it may concern,
The family farm was bustling. Roosters were crowing, the emu, an escapee from the local emu farm, was waiting by the gate for his feed and the donkey was braying at something while sheep grazed around him. I was atop the tractor fender with my papa while he worked the fields. I don’t remember how old I was, I wasn’t in school at the time and spent most of my days on that tractor or chasing geese while I waited for my sister to get off the bus. That day was different, my mom, who I hadn’t seen in a week maybe longer from what I can remember pulled onto the gravel road loaded me in the car and we left. My dad was there who I hadn’t seen in who knows how long. I never saw the family farm again; my papa had lost it shortly after.
In order for you to understand why I am applying I think you need to understand how I got here. Most of what I know about farming was from my papa or really old farm books. I know more now than I ever had. In high school I raised a New Hampshire for FFA and I was a part of the FFA quiz team. That was the first two years of high school. The last two years I was abandoned by my mom and dad, who my mom just started dating again. I moved in with my then boyfriend’s family, now husband, worked through high school and completed twelve hours of college classes before graduating in 2010. Statistically, I wasn’t supposed to be here or complete college.
Currently, I raise quail, Muscovy ducks and chickens. I also grow squash, arugula, tomatoes, okra, potatoes etc. As of right now I am trying to log what is planted, when and how the plants did in my soil as well as testing the soil before spring and after the last harvest in fall. I also log the livestock, birth days, cull dates and dress weight. As I have been doing these things and learning with firsthand experience my love for Agriculture has come alive again. My hope is to one day own a small farm again. This one, unlike my grandfathers, would be sustainable.
With the help of Sam Houston State University, I would like to understand crop rotation and the business more. My goals after graduation would be to have a small farm that at least sustains itself, not necessarily bringing in a large margin and teaching others about sustainability. I also feel if I could understand food safety, regulation and livestock production and crop knowledge I could be successful. I believe flourish in the SAFE program and I will do what I always have done, work hard and make it work.
I need an extra pair of eyes to look at my college entrance essay and see if it makes sense or if it is very rambly. I am jittery and having issues. I am just under 500 words. My initial undergraduate is not in Agriculture so my essay and references I sent out to my colleagues will be weighed heavily.Prompt:
1. A personal essay that addresses your interest in the program, post-graduation intentions, learning expectations, and current involvement in agriculture
My Essay:
To whom it may concern,
The family farm was bustling. Roosters were crowing, the emu, an escapee from the local emu farm, was waiting by the gate for his feed and the donkey was braying at something while sheep grazed around him. I was atop the tractor fender with my papa while he worked the fields. I don’t remember how old I was, I wasn’t in school at the time and spent most of my days on that tractor or chasing geese while I waited for my sister to get off the bus. That day was different, my mom, who I hadn’t seen in a week maybe longer from what I can remember pulled onto the gravel road loaded me in the car and we left. My dad was there who I hadn’t seen in who knows how long. I never saw the family farm again; my papa had lost it shortly after.
In order for you to understand why I am applying I think you need to understand how I got here. Most of what I know about farming was from my papa or really old farm books. I know more now than I ever had. In high school I raised a New Hampshire for FFA and I was a part of the FFA quiz team. That was the first two years of high school. The last two years I was abandoned by my mom and dad, who my mom just started dating again. I moved in with my then boyfriend’s family, now husband, worked through high school and completed twelve hours of college classes before graduating in 2010. Statistically, I wasn’t supposed to be here or complete college.
Currently, I raise quail, Muscovy ducks and chickens. I also grow squash, arugula, tomatoes, okra, potatoes etc. As of right now I am trying to log what is planted, when and how the plants did in my soil as well as testing the soil before spring and after the last harvest in fall. I also log the livestock, birth days, cull dates and dress weight. As I have been doing these things and learning with firsthand experience my love for Agriculture has come alive again. My hope is to one day own a small farm again. This one, unlike my grandfathers, would be sustainable.
With the help of Sam Houston State University, I would like to understand crop rotation and the business more. My goals after graduation would be to have a small farm that at least sustains itself, not necessarily bringing in a large margin and teaching others about sustainability. I also feel if I could understand food safety, regulation and livestock production and crop knowledge I could be successful. I believe flourish in the SAFE program and I will do what I always have done, work hard and make it work.
