my story

[horsecrazychicklovingkid]

You need more detail. Here is your version compared to your version with detail I added and corrected grammar.

When she went up to her room to go to bed she was really scared because she did not want to see the ghost. She said to herself “tommrow I am going to do some rescher at the library to see what had happened in this house before we lived here. So when she woke up she got her usal breakfast witch was a bowl of cearal and a hot cocoa and went strat to the library to do some research. She did not find too much all she could find was a few books on her house but the did not say anything about a ghost so she went home.

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When she entered her room to go to bed, she was frightened of seeing the dreadful ghostly creature again. Tomorrow I will go to the library and do some research on who lived in this house before us, she thought to herself. When she awoke, she settled down for her usual breakfast of cereal and hot cocoa. When she was finished, she headed straight to the library. She could barely find a thing, all there was were a few books about her house. They didn't mention ghosts. Disappointed, she returned to her home.

 

[SebrightLuver]

Why don't you write something of a decent length before posting? This is supposed to be YOUR story, not everyone elses.

I have a story on the go, I've been writing it for several months but I'm not posting it until its done and you can read the whole thing.