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[Symphony]

MORE!! Make the girl an FBI agent, JK!

 

[luvinmychickens]

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So what? Dino yours is just as awesome as horses don't let people get you down!

I wasn't trying get him not to write. I just thought I would point it out. I'm not trying to start anything. Just a pointer. I just thought that it started a little similar, but not anymore. Sorry if I got you upset Dino.

 

[luvinmychickens]

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How is it like mine? You don't know the ending to mine.

I guarantee it will be different. Keep writing Dino!

Good. I mean, excellent! I hope that you peeps don't think that I was trying to start something. I just found it a little similar, because these are the first stories I read that didn't include chickens.

 

[DinosRBirds]

Suddenly there was a knock at the door. Dad got up and opened it.
"Is Lena Horowitz here?" a male's voice asked.
"Lena! An officer is here to talk to you."dad yelled from the door.
"Coming!"I yelled, running to the door.
The face of the officer looked familiar, but I couldn't tell who he was because he was wearing one of those big, tan hats and it was covering the top of his face.
"Lena Horowitz I presume? Can you come with me? I have some questions to ask you."
I looked at him. "As long as my dad comes with me."
He smiled. "Sure. I just need you to come to the station for a few questions so we can clear things up."
"Ok."I walked to the police cruiser, and got in the back seat so I could sit with my dad. To tell the truth, I was nervous. I'd never been interrogated before.
Dad got in next to me, and the officer backed down the drive, and then went the way with the shortest route.
"So, how's the leg?" He asked.
I wondered why he wanted to know. He sounded interested in it. "I-uh-it's fine,"I said. "I have a fancy blue cast, and everything."I smiled at the joke.
He chuckled,"Blue, huh?My favorite."
"Been feeling ok?" He asked.
"Yes, its fine."
"Is your friend," he paused, thinking. "Amy, was it? Is she ok? I heard some burgular attacked her."
"Yes. In fact, She's at my house right now."I said.
"Really?" he asked, surprised.
"Yes." I wondered how he knew we were friends. I started thinking.
He must have been there, but, who is he?
"Well, sorry to interrupt your, um..., sleepover?" he was probably wondering what she was doing at my house.I didn't blame him. It must make him feel intrusive.
I looked at my dad, catching his eye, "Yes, It's a sleepover."
Dad comprehended my message quickly. He didn't know until now that she was sleeping here tonight.
I looked up out the window, trying to find the big and little dippers.The car turned twice in a row, and we were now in the parking lot of the police station.
The officer parked his cruiser, and said, "C'mon, everyone out, as he got out and escorted us inside to an elevator on the left side of the first floor...

To be continued....

 

[DinosRBirds]

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So what? Dino yours is just as awesome as horses don't let people get you down!

I wasn't trying get him not to write. I just thought I would point it out. I'm not trying to start anything. Just a pointer. I just thought that it started a little similar, but not anymore. Sorry if I got you upset Dino.

i'm sorry, too, for making it so hard to tell that i'm a girl!

I even look like one except for the cleavage. i get called a boy by total strangers. its sooooo funny!
no, its ok. I'm picked on all the time by my classmates, it dosn't bother me.
besides, you weren't picking on me. I understand

 

[luvinmychickens]

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I wasn't trying get him not to write. I just thought I would point it out. I'm not trying to start anything. Just a pointer. I just thought that it started a little similar, but not anymore. Sorry if I got you upset Dino.

i'm sorry , too, for making it so hard to tell that i'm a girl!

no, its ok. I'm picked on all the time by my classmates, it dosn't bother me.
besides, you weren't picking on me. I understand

Sorry, I just write 'him' a lot for some reason. And if you think that I was picking on you, I wasn't. Trust me, I know how it feels to be picked on. When I was in private school, that's all what kids would ever do to me. I know how it feels, so I would never do that to someone (maybe my sis a little

) But, sorry if I made you think that I was trying to shut your thread down or make you feel bad.

 

[Symphony]

...he told Dad to stay and then...

 

[DinosRBirds]

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the officer never told him to stay. what are you getting at?
sounds good, but it would ruin the plot i made... kidding, but seriously, that's not what's gonna happen.
this is suppused to be the excitement break of the story

 

[DinosRBirds]

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the officer never told him to stay. what are you getting at?
sounds good, but it would ruin the plot i made... kidding, but seriously, that's not what's gonna happen.
this is suppused to be the excitement break of the story

then it'll speed up, and fall again

 

[DinosRBirds]

how do you all like my story so far, guys?