Should I make RP books?

[kyda13]

heres some things:

on her test she got Dauntless, Erudite, and Candor on her test, (2 nd paragraph on sam.)

"Welcome!" a blonde woman said, quieting everyone. "yesterday you took the test. you were told what would be best for you. But today, you get to choose which faction you will be in for the rest of your life." she said holding her hands. her name was Jeanine Matthews,she was the leader of the erudite, and wore a blue suit for women. "Now when I call your name, you will come up and take the knife, making a small slice in your hand. then you will drop your blood into one of these five bowls. each one represents a faction." she said pointing to the knife and the five white bowls. She sighed and smiled a thin smile. She walked over to the bowl and pulled out a piece of paper. she said looking at the crowd waiting for the person to come up. (who is it she called?)

(ill do some more later.)

 

[Duckopolis]

I still don't understand RP.

 

[TinyBeaks]

heres some things:

on her test she got Dauntless, Erudite, and Candor on her test,  (2 nd paragraph on sam.)

"Welcome!" a blonde woman said, quieting everyone. "yesterday you took the test. you were told what would be best for you. But today, you get to choose which faction you will be in for the rest of your life." she said holding her hands. her name was Jeanine Matthews,she was the leader of the erudite, and wore a blue suit for women. "Now when I call your name, you will come up and take the knife, making a small slice in your hand. then you will drop your blood into one of these five bowls. each one represents a faction." she said pointing to the knife and the five white bowls. She sighed and smiled a thin smile. She wal[COLOR=333333]ked over to the bowl and pulled out a piece of paper. she said looking at the crowd waiting for the person to come up.[/COLOR] [COLOR=333333](who is it she called?)[/COLOR]

(ill do some more later.)

(That was Ivory, who I cut out.)

 

[kyda13]

what do you mean?

 

[kyda13]

(That was Ivory, who I cut out.)

you can put carolina or mik there.

 

[TinyBeaks]

(The person who Jeanine called was Ivory, who you said quit.)

 

[kyda13]

I still don't understand RP.

what do you mean?

 

[kyda13]

okay so i was reading the end and realized that you put kaleb in the ceremony, hes already been in a ceremony, because hes the trainer for dauntless recruits in swords. you can have him sitting next to sam and missy because those three are friends, its just that he already did his test and whole thing. i hate being a critic, it makes me feel mean. i don't ever want to be a editor for a real job. gah! horrible!

 

[TinyBeaks]

okay so i was reading the end and realized that you put kaleb in the ceremony, hes already been in a ceremony, because hes the trainer for dauntless recruits in swords. you can have him sitting next to sam and missy because those three are friends, its just that he already did his test and whole thing. i hate being a critic, it makes me feel mean. i don't ever want to be a editor for a real job. gah! horrible! 

Oh, thank you.

 

[kyda13]

yeah