Looks like you have a good start. I've never been any good at prose.Any body good at verse? I had a thought when the adrenaline started gushing..
doing a poem to the "Night before Christmas'
The Eve before Eggodus
Twas the eve before eggsodus and what do you know?
Mom sat there staring with eyes all aglow.
Two eggs were pipping and had begun the show
So mom just had to stay 'in the know'
She whispered so gently ' I know you can do it'
and continued to sit there watching all through it.
Come little eggsie, leggsie, get those shells crackin'
This ain't no time for nappin'
There work to do so we can hear yappin'
Golly, too many verses to make up. I need help!