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which word, Peppily? it's an official word now! and kkk.

Really? Never would have guessed, to be honest.

Haha, not a problem.

it's a wurd that I just invented, lol. and edited version:

Candle on the Water
I named this after one of my favorite songs, and it's importance will come into the stary later.
Disclaimer Thingy- I do not own Harvest Moon or anything else... except this computer... and my free will... and a flying cow...
ANYWAYS! this is my first Fanfic, and reader's discretion advised- I probably suck.
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Dearest Diary,
The farm here in Forget-Me-Not Valley is ugly. The house is ugly. Most of the boys are ugly...

. I hate this place.
Honestly and sincerely,
Claire

*Flashback*

"Well, this is the farm you'll be taking over!" I wanted to strangle the short guy in red that they call Thomas.

All the way to the farm, he had bragged about the farm being "In it's prime", "beautiful", and "Well taken care of".

Well taken care of, my butt! It was overgrown, ugly, and just plain HORRIBLE!

"Don't strangle him, don't strangle him, don't freakin' strangle him..." I muttered.

"What was that you said, Claire?" He asked me.

"Oh, nothing! I was just saying that it's going to take a while to clean up!" I said quite peppily.

I quickly set to work, pulling up weeds. Eventually I turned my attention to the sticks and stones.

When I felt that a good chunk was cleared away, I went to meet the villagers.

As I neared the Villa to meet the people there, I noticed a strange looking man leave the building. He had silvery hair, green eyes, and he wore a cheetah print jacket. He walked up to me.

He began to talk to me, introducing himself. "Hello. I am Phantom Skye, Prince of the Stars and known to be quite the Ladies Man"

"Whatever." I rolled my eyes. "I'm Claire." He reached for my hand and was about to kiss it when I pulled away and slapped his hand away. "Just who do you think you are?" I said.

Just then, What's-Her-Face burst out of the building. "HEY! Aren't you that famous theif that warns his victims ahead of time?" she looked angry.

I looked at Skye. He didn't seem fazed. "Don't let such raw anger steal away your beauty." he said.

Apparently, that shiz worked on her. She blushed, and Skye ran off. "What are you doing?" I began to shake her back to her senses.

"Wow, Phantom Skye..." she ran after him, and she lost him as soon as he got out of the villa area.

"He-he got away." she said, still blushing.

"You are really HARD to win over, aren't you?" I said with as much sarcasm as possible.

*End of Flashback*

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Please R&R! And any chapter Ideas would be quite appreciated! And Bob the Dream Catcher says hi!

 

[Gerbil]

It was good! But I lack skill or practice of any kind in that stuff, although perhaps I will try it someday.

 

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same here! thanketh jooseth!

 

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It's an actual word, by the way. Inventing your own words, unless you're naming something in a fantasy setting, isn't a good idea.

Now, who exactly is what's-her-face? Shiz doesn't work, you need to use a different word or just 'that'.

The ending part is confusing, I can't tell who is speaking when and who is doing what.

 

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whats-her-face is Lumina, a character in the story that Claire hadn't met yet. "I" is Claire. and i may say sumthin other than shiz, i not sure.

 

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whats-her-face is Lumina, a character in the story that Claire hadn't met yet. "I" is Claire. and i may say sumthin other than shiz, i not sure.

and it is a fantasy setting, in a Harvest Moon game, DS Cute 2 b exact.​

 

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whats-her-face is Lumina, a character in the story that Claire hadn't met yet. "I" is Claire. and i may say sumthin other than shiz, i not sure.

Ah, okay. Can you use some other words than 'she' to describe Lumina? Maybe Claire noticed something about her hair or style of dress.

Also, what was with the "You're really hard to win over, aren't you?" at the end? Is Claire saying that to Skye or Lumina?​

 

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g2g, bedtime.

 

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whats-her-face is Lumina, a character in the story that Claire hadn't met yet. "I" is Claire. and i may say sumthin other than shiz, i not sure.

Ah, okay. Can you use some other words than 'she' to describe Lumina? Maybe Claire noticed something about her hair or style of dress.

Also, what was with the "You're really hard to win over, aren't you?" at the end? Is Claire saying that to Skye or Lumina?

Lumina, Skye already left.

 

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g2g, bedtime.

Bye EE!!!