who said the character wasn’t walking on an island!Grammar police! Lol. Isle to asile! I love it! You make it so much more in depth and I can feel it more. You are amazing!

I simply added to what you had. I think that if you continue this story, you can do the same thing! Just write a section like this, and go over it a few times. Don’t be afraid to add detail, or change the word structure. You can really improve as a writer by doing that sort of thing, and I like practice it a lot. Keep going, and Keep reading to! Sometimes, I’ll find myself at a loss for ideas. By reading you can learn how to form more complex sentences that really make it flow.