I am kinda getting into poetry and writing lately... could you guys read this poem I wrote and give me any advice or opinions you have? Thanks, I'd appreciate it! 
"A drop cools my skin on the tip of my nose and sends a chill through my bones.
I walk under a tree that keeps me dry, but I’m confronted yet again with the dark, gray sky.
A small grey pigeon preens his feathers under a small, green leaf, but flutters away and again I am alone.
Drops become sheets, and I am cold to the touch… what did I forget, and why?
The streets are empty and I only hear the sloshing of my shoes as I run through the grey, moving streets.
I cannot see. I cannot hear. I am cold and alone. What made my life stop?
A old women silently watches me, her umbrella in hand and a hat on her head, her hair thin as wheat.
I look at her with sad, miserable eyes and feel water rolling down my cheeks, though I do not know if they are tears or raindrops.
I feel a warm touch on my back, and I freeze.
Could it be true… will the rain truly stop?
A hand caress’s my skin, even if it may only be a warm, summer breeze.
I look across the street and see the old women, and I smile.
She stares at me and carefully folds the umbrella and takes off her hat.
Then smiles back with warm, brown eyes… and this makes me stop and think for a while.
Who is it who helped me feel warm and loved? Was it the old women? I walked to a bench and sat.
I wondered, is there something I am missing? What have I forgotten? Something tugs at my heart.
I remember far back, what was it I was told? “Do not stray from the path of God.”
God is my answer? I cannot believe its true. Is he my missing part?
A verse flashes through my mind, and the fact I remember is quite odd.
“I am the way, the truth and the light. No one comes to the father except through me.”
My life has been torn apart for as long as I can remember; the emptiness was always there.
A small voice whispers in my ear and says, “Jesus is the key.”
Jesus is my key. His love is always true and fair.
Tears well up in my eyes as I whisper, slowly and truthfully, “I believe. I believe in you, Jesus. Forever and always, as my one and only God.”
Owned and written by Katy P.

"A drop cools my skin on the tip of my nose and sends a chill through my bones.
I walk under a tree that keeps me dry, but I’m confronted yet again with the dark, gray sky.
A small grey pigeon preens his feathers under a small, green leaf, but flutters away and again I am alone.
Drops become sheets, and I am cold to the touch… what did I forget, and why?
The streets are empty and I only hear the sloshing of my shoes as I run through the grey, moving streets.
I cannot see. I cannot hear. I am cold and alone. What made my life stop?
A old women silently watches me, her umbrella in hand and a hat on her head, her hair thin as wheat.
I look at her with sad, miserable eyes and feel water rolling down my cheeks, though I do not know if they are tears or raindrops.
I feel a warm touch on my back, and I freeze.
Could it be true… will the rain truly stop?
A hand caress’s my skin, even if it may only be a warm, summer breeze.
I look across the street and see the old women, and I smile.
She stares at me and carefully folds the umbrella and takes off her hat.
Then smiles back with warm, brown eyes… and this makes me stop and think for a while.
Who is it who helped me feel warm and loved? Was it the old women? I walked to a bench and sat.
I wondered, is there something I am missing? What have I forgotten? Something tugs at my heart.
I remember far back, what was it I was told? “Do not stray from the path of God.”
God is my answer? I cannot believe its true. Is he my missing part?
A verse flashes through my mind, and the fact I remember is quite odd.
“I am the way, the truth and the light. No one comes to the father except through me.”
My life has been torn apart for as long as I can remember; the emptiness was always there.
A small voice whispers in my ear and says, “Jesus is the key.”
Jesus is my key. His love is always true and fair.
Tears well up in my eyes as I whisper, slowly and truthfully, “I believe. I believe in you, Jesus. Forever and always, as my one and only God.”
Owned and written by Katy P.
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