So...Kid's story, what do you think?

[CaliFarmsAR]

Hi, everybody! So... I've been working on a kid's story and before I go further, I'd like your opinions! I'll post one page a week, and I'd love to hear what you honestly think. Here's the cover and first page. Thanks!
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Do it!! I’m already wanting to read the hole thing!!!!

 

[PioneerChicks]

I stopped getting alerts for this thread and almost forgot about it! Anyways...

Feeling the pull of a good story...Tuesday seems so far away!

 

[CaliFarmsAR]

I can’t wait! Do the people find her nest??? I need to find out!!!!

 

[Chicken Chiquita]

I love it!! So cute!! I can't wait to see what happens!!

 

[cluckmecoop7]

Loving the story!

 

[FeatheredFriends&Horses2]

Hi all! Sorry I'm a day late, yesterday got ahead of me! This first page was supposed to go with last weeks.

 

[CaliFarmsAR]

Hi all! Sorry I'm a day late, yesterday got ahead of me! This first page was supposed to go with last weeks.
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I love this story!! I love how the hen will not give up!!

 

[cluckmecoop7]

I love this story!! I love how the hen will not give up!!

Same!!!!!!!

 

[PioneerChicks]

Please tell me that these eggs are fertilized, for the poor hen's sake!!! I suddenly see myself breaking a broody from the hen's view

Loving the story! Please keep it up!

 

[FeatheredFriends&Horses2]

Please tell me that these eggs are fertilized, for the poor hen's sake!!! I suddenly see myself breaking a broody from the hen's view

Loving the story! Please keep it up!

*Slight spoilers*

Hopefully you guys like the end of the story. This next page is rather sad, but the last is sweet... I felt like it captured the simple pleasures of life and the disappointments (especially farm life) without involving any death or anything. I've probably already given away to much, sorry!