story i started to work on *no tittle yet*

miss heny

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okay no tittle, yet, steal ideas and die!

Prelude


"hurry!" whispered Dienesheya as she herded the children and two teens down a hall, she looked at the oldest, she looked at the oldest "you know were to bring them" she handed him a crystal bomb " use this to seal the exit" "but" he said, "What about you? yes you were a warrior, but now you area healer! are you gonna truly-" She put her hand over his mouth "i know if i do this i will become a outcast, i know, but you must survive, with you children our race will not survive" she said as she smiled, "now go!" before they could protest, she shove then through the door and locked it. "goodbye" she muttered and left with a arrow notch in her light bow "goodbye" she said one more time before attacking.



chapter one

"Ah crap" Dienesheya cursed as the string of her light bow fad "no, not now, not at this time!" She cursed again as she watch the platoons of Gorgonos, a snake like race that as been attacking the Kelishans for over a century, start to run over to her hiding point. They finally caught the Phantom Kelishan, the single Alien that hit and runs have done more damage then the bombing have done in the last century, Dienesheya closed her eyes and draw her sword, read to right to the death until one sound she never thought she would be so happy to hear, a Kelishan call to attack. The Gorgonos Stumble back, they swore she was alone!

Dienesheya sighed in relief as a warrior gallop on a crystal horse to her way "Are you all right?" he as as he hopped off. She nodded a yes, and looked over him as she sheathed her sword and put her light bow away, he had no tattoo and was young, maybe 1,600? Then she notice the color cloth that was on his horse, blood red.

Before she could say a thing he asked "what your rank? What Legion are you from? Your weapons are not standard, also what is your full name." Dienesheya "No rank, No legion, Dieneshaya Lakan Akin" He looked over her again, she knew what was going to happen next. "put your hands in front of you now please" he pulled out a pair of bracelets from his saddle bag, and put then on her wrists, they quickly tighten around her wrist and bonded them together. He then did something she wasn't expecting, he slung her over his shoulder "OI!" she growled and started to kick him, he quickly slung her over the rear end of his horse. He hopped onto the horse and rub his chin, he had remember of her kicking before, but not that hard.\. He tapped his horse into a trot, heading back to camp zoning out the name that Dienesheya was calling him.


(please comment what you think :) )
 
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It's good but I'm kinda lost. Are you going to fill in later on different aleins, spaceships, tech, ect? (Does Deinishiea look like a human? You called her an alien, so she must have something different about her, to make her something besides human)
 

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