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Misfits Farm 92

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Suddenly Hunter burst into camp snarling like a mad dog. He looked over at Amber and snarled "YOU!!!" Amber stood her ground. Hunter flung himself at Amber. He immediately pinned her down and began to wildly claw at her. Amber yelped multiple times as she struggled and clawed at him. Then all hell broke loose. Dogs fought each other without even knowing who they were fighting for.

Amber continued to struggle when Max leaped off of Alpha Rock and landed on Hunter. Hunter of course was knocked over when Max landed on him. Amber sprung to her feet but Max and Hunter were already in the middle of a fight. That's when Amber saw Tasha on top of Sam. Poor old Sam was struggling to fight back.
Amber barreled into Tasha. Tasha was knocked sideways into a wall. "Well OUCH!" Tasha snarled. Sam got up and limped away. Tasha ran at Amber but Amber almost managed to dodge sideways. Amber still got a slash in her left shoulder though. She ran forward and slashed Tasha's leg with her teeth. Tasha main problem was that she thought that she to civilized to use teeth so she tries to use her claws.
Suddenly a dog howled loud enough to stop the fighting. It was Belle the alpha female about to get pushed off of the tallest part of Alpha Rock by Max. That's right MAX. He was about to take it to far. Hunter froze but Belle howled "STOP THE FIGHTING!!! WE UNDERSTAND THAT YOU DON'T WANT US TO CONTROL YOU AND WE WILL STOP!!!" Hunter silently slipped out of camp apparently giving up.
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chicken3fly

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Suddenly Hunter burst into camp snarling like a mad dog. He looked over at Amber and snarled "YOU!!!" Amber stood her ground. Hunter flung himself at Amber. He immediately pinned her down and began to wildly claw at her. Amber yelped multiple times as she struggled and clawed at him. Then all hell broke loose. Dogs fought each other without even knowing who they were fighting for.

Amber continued to struggle when Max leaped off of Alpha Rock and landed on Hunter. Hunter of course was knocked over when Max landed on him. Amber sprung to her feet but Max and Hunter were already in the middle of a fight. That's when Amber saw Tasha on top of Sam. Poor old Sam was struggling to fight back.
Amber barreled into Tasha. Tasha was knocked sideways into a wall. "Well OUCH!" Tasha snarled. Sam got up and limped away. Tasha ran at Amber but Amber almost managed to dodge sideways. Amber still got a slash in her left shoulder though. She ran forward and slashed Tasha's leg with her teeth. Tasha main problem was that she thought that she to civilized to use teeth so she tries to use her claws.
Suddenly a dog howled loud enough to stop the fighting. It was Belle the alpha female about to get pushed off of the tallest part of Alpha Rock by Max. That's right MAX. He was about to take it to far. Hunter froze but Belle howled "STOP THE FIGHTING!!! WE UNDERSTAND THAT YOU DON'T WANT US TO CONTROL YOU AND WE WILL STOP!!!" Hunter silently slipped out of camp apparently giving up.
@chicken3fly
I will hilight in yellow the parts that should be changed/removed and I might edit a bit in red
 

chicken3fly

Crowing
May 27, 2020
579
7,401
416
Not telling!
Suddenly Hunter burst into camp snarling like a mad dog. He looked over at Amber and snarled "YOU!!!" Amber stood her ground. Hunter flung himself at Amber. He immediately pinned her down and began to wildly claw at her. Amber yelped multiple times as she struggled and clawed at him. Then all hell broke loose. Dogs fought each other without even knowing who they were fighting for.

Amber continued to struggle when Max leaped off of Alpha Rock and landed on Hunter. Hunter of course was knocked over when Max landed on him. Amber sprung to her feet but Max and Hunter were already in the middle of a fight. That's when Amber saw Tasha on top of Sam. Poor old Sam was struggling to fight back.
Amber barreled into Tasha. Tasha was knocked sideways into a wall. "Well OUCH!" Tasha snarled. Sam got up and limped away. Tasha ran at Amber but Amber almost managed to dodge sideways. Amber still got a slash in her left shoulder though. She ran forward and slashed Tasha's leg with her teeth. Tasha main problem was that she thought that she to civilized to use teeth so she tries to use her claws.
Suddenly a dog howled loud enough to stop the fighting. It was Belle the alpha female about to get pushed off of the tallest part of Alpha Rock by Max. That's right MAX. He was about to take it to far. Hunter froze but Belle howled "STOP THE FIGHTING!!! WE UNDERSTAND THAT YOU DON'T WANT US TO CONTROL YOU AND WE WILL STOP!!!" Hunter silently slipped out of camp apparently giving up.
@chicken3fly
Suddenly Hunter burst into camp snarling like a mad dog. He looked over at Amber and snarled "YOU!!!" Amber stood her ground. Hunter flung himself at Amber. He immediately pinned her down and began to wildly claw at her. Amber yelped multiple times as she struggled and clawed at him. Then all hell broke loose. Dogs fought each other without even knowing who they were fighting for.

Amber continued to struggle when Max leaped off of Alpha Rock and landed on Hunter. Hunter of course was knocked over when Max landed on him. Amber sprung to her feet but Max and Hunter were already in the middle of a fight. That's when Amber saw Tasha on top of Sam. Poor old Sam was struggling to fight back.
Amber barreled into Tasha. Tasha was knocked sideways into a wall. "Well OUCH!" Tasha snarled. Sam got up and limped away. Tasha ran at Amber but Amber almost managed to dodge sideways. Amber still got a slash in her left shoulder though. She ran forward and slashed Tasha's leg with her teeth. Tasha main problem was that she thought that she to civilized to use teeth so she tries to use her claws.
Suddenly a dog howled loud enough to stop the fighting. It was Belle the alpha female about to get pushed off of the tallest part of Alpha Rock by Max. That's right MAX. He was about to take it to far. Hunter froze but Belle howled "STOP THE FIGHTING!!! WE UNDERSTAND THAT YOU DON'T WANT US TO CONTROL YOU AND WE WILL STOP!!!" Hunter silently slipped out of camp apparently giving up.
@chicken3fly
Looked it over with my mom, she is of the opinion that the description of the fight is too graphic for kids, too much details- using teeth and clawing at each other. There can be a fight without how the injuries came to be.
 

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