( by the way, if you have two or more characters and there in the same place, you have to separate their actions and thoughts with lines like this:-------.
If you are different character in the different part of the world, you have to separate them with a line like this:~~~~~~~~~~~.
Got it?)
Anien glared at Tamina, and hissed silently at her.
" She doesn't like sea gryphons if you can't tell." He said with an edge to his voice.
Some respect? They're helping us, idiot. He thought about Tamina.
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" If you can't tell?" Taming snarled," Those fish kissers killed my-"
She was cut off by a dark, hard galore from Anien. She narrowed his eyes at her and make a growling noise in his throat.