Anna's Artists Chat Thread

[Amer]

@Amer as for your story, maybe I'm out of it but I didn't feel any issues with the pacing. I thought the things you said you thought were problematic were actually just fine as they are.
Reading through it I only notice small nitpicks here and there with wording etc but nothing worth mentioning really. Great work!

I'm going to try and write some more of my own story. I may even completely rewrite these first two chapters because I'm still not happy with them. I know, I know, I'm sorry lol

I think that and the very end will be the biggest writing hurdles for me because I don't know how to believably get my character in and out of the fantasy world. It's annoying because I have the setting, the worldbuilding, the backstory, the characters, the plot twists, the overarching narrative/theme all perfectly laid out...and like, I have individual scenes in my mind...but I have no idea how to put it all together with a coherent plot grrr

Well thank you then!
XD you think that’s bad? I’m literally winging it. I literally just started with nothing but the vague idea about the massacre and how Zephyr would introduce the idea to the protagonist. And then I wait until ideas come and write another chapter. Then if I don’t know what’s going to happen next I wait for an idea to come in my head, no matter how long it takes. There is no plot arch. Just a vague idea of what I want Peregrine to accomplish.

 

[lilmillefleur]

Well thank you then!
XD you think that’s bad? I’m literally winging it. I literally just started with nothing but the vague idea about the massacre and how Zephyr would introduce the idea to the protagonist. And then I wait until ideas come and write another chapter. Then if I don’t know what’s going to happen next I wait for an idea to come in my head, no matter how long it takes. There is no plot arch. Just a vague idea of what I want Peregrine to accomplish.

Well then I guess we can be pantsters together, we're just flying by the seats of our pants

 

[lilmillefleur]

OH HOLD ON I have ONE big suggestion for your writing, ready?
Give names to the different kinds of canaries. Don't just call them red and black canaries because that's a bit boring and repetitive.
BOOM! I gave you some good advice!

 

[Misfits Farm 92]

Hey there! I'd love to see some of your art! You might know that this is more of a chat thread but you are welcome to share your art here too if you like!

Yeah... I have the feeling I'll be talking more about whatever the art is instead of the actual art. That always happens when I share art. I write a long explanation of the story that the art is representing. It's not a bad thing but an art thread is for art so a slightly off topic chat thread should perfect for me! Oh no I wrote a long post that could be summed up in one little sentence again.

 

[lilmillefleur]

Yeah... I have the feeling I'll be talking more about whatever the art is instead of the actual art. That always happens when I share art. I write a long explanation of the story that the art is representing. It's not a bad thing but an art thread is for art so a slightly off topic chat thread should perfect for me! Oh no I wrote a long post that could be summed up in one little sentence again.

Dont worry I do that all the time!

 

[Amer]

Well then I guess we can be pantsters together, we're just flying by the seats of our pants

Yep!

OH HOLD ON I have ONE big suggestion for your writing, ready?
Give names to the different kinds of canaries. Don't just call them red and black canaries because that's a bit boring and repetitive.
BOOM! I gave you some good advice!

like what? I wanted to explain ahead of time that these are actually subspecies, not “races” but “races” are what the canaries call them because they aren’t scientists and “subspecies” just sounds clinical.
The Ruddys and the Greys?

The Bloodies and the Sables?
XD you’re a bloody canary!!!
The Blacks and Reds just sounds wrong.
You’re right that it drags.
I’m especially attached to those long and annoying names because they were used in the story the lore is based on, which happens to be the first and only decently long story I finished, so it’s pretty sacred. But now I see that that is good advice.

 

[Sapphire Sebright]

Yep!


like what? I wanted to explain ahead of time that these are actually subspecies, not “races” but “races” are what the canaries call them because they aren’t scientists and “subspecies” just sounds clinical.
The Ruddys and the Greys?

The Bloodies and the Sables?
XD you’re a bloody canary!!!
The Blacks and Reds just sounds wrong.
You’re right that it drags.
I’m especially attached to those long and annoying names because they were used in the story the lore is based on, which happens to be the first and only decently long story I finished, so it’s pretty sacred. But now I see that that is good advice.

Cherries and Ebonies?
Rubies and Onyxes?
Garnets and Quartzes (smoky quartz)?
Dawns and Dusks? Twilights? Midnights?

 

[Amer]

Cherries and Ebonies?
Rubies and Onyxes?
Garnets and Quartzes (smoky quartz)?
Dawns and Dusks? Twilights? Midnights?

Uhh
These are way too flowery. How would you like to call your neighbor a Daisy and call yourself a Tulip?
XD

 

[lilmillefleur]

Maybe come up with some made up words.
Sorry I can't be of more help, I'm terrible with names lol

 

[Amer]

Maybe come up with some made up words.
Sorry I can't be of more help, I'm terrible with names lol

So am I! That is an evident issue.