I think her bread is a little yellow due to using honey instead of sugar. And it does look like a little more flour would help, but I am not sure why it did not brown. Mine browns when I use honey instead of sugar... you can use 1 tablespoon of sugar instead of the honey.
Instead of parchment paper, I use corn meal.
I don't take the tempurature of the bread since I don't have a probe thermometer

, but I do tap on the bottom to see if it sounds hollow. Then bake it another 5 minutes... I usually tend to pull it out a little too soon.