How a seat belt changed my life. Book is OUT! Pg. 21 for info!

[kyeschicks]

I made a schedule so you all can see-

-When I'm going to post a chapter

-When I'm going to edit a chapter

-When I'm going to create the book covers

-When the book covers will be shown

-When I'll post a BYC update

-When the book is going to be completed

-And when the digital & physical copy will be available.

Here's the URL to it-

http://www.wix.com/Skitz15k/Book/Schedule

if it takes a lot to load (its a flash website and not recommended for dial-up users) here's the thumbnail of a screen shot I took-



click on the thumbnail and once the picture shows and its too blurry (or too small), click on the picture again to zoom in.

EDIT- and yes! I know I forgot the "E" in "Tuesday" on the screen shot

I fixed it on the website, but not on the screen shot.

 

[kyeschicks]

I know that I'm supposed to post chapter 6 tomorrow, but I just wanted to post it tonight XD so here it goes!


If you find any typos, PLEASE let me know!

Chapter 6 - Hospital

While I was laying there I all of a sudden felt very sleepy. Wondering what was happening to me, but I didnt have any idea. The only thing that came to my mind was “Death”. I kept asking myself “Is this how death feels?” over and over again even though I knew I wasn’t going to get an answer.
My dad didn’t know what to do. He couldn’t just stand outside the car looking at how bad my body was, yet that was all he could do because everytime he touched me, I would felt this horrible pain.
A few minutes later, this lady came and told us that she was a nurse and that she could help me. She told my dad not to move me because it could be dangerous. I don’t recall exactly what she did, but she helped the pain go down which was really nice of her because it was an unbearable pain.
Finally the ambulance came! I felt so relieved! They took me out of the car and rushed me inside the ambulance. It was raining and cold outside especially because it was night. Once I was in the ambulance they ripped my clothes off and started to clean all the blood from my body. I asked them if I could sleep because I was really tired, but they said no. I heard some crying and I thought it was my sister, but it was my mom. I didn’t even see her arrive. My mom was my hero and it hurt me a lot hear her crying because I couldn’t imagine how much pain she was going through. I had my eyes closed the entire time because I was so sleepy. I tried to stay awake but it was almost impossible. It was like trying to sleep when you’re not tired. As I was falling asleep, everything seemed to calm down. The sirens started to get quieter and quieter, as if I had some gates in my ears and they were starting to close. I couldn’t move, talk or hear. I felt like I was getting closer to death until I heard someone say “Are you still with us?” and I could barely say yes.
I fell asleep for about 2 minutes and when I woke up I was already in the hospital. I closed my eyes because I couldn’t see, I thought I was going blind. At that moment I felt like everything was over. No more T.V., no more soccer, no more anything. My broken hand was on my chest and it was sliding off, I tried to keep it from falling but I couldn’t move it a bit. I was so scared because I thought it would completely fall apart from my arm and so I started to scream “My hand is falling! Someone help me! It’s falling!” then someone finally put it closer to my neck which kept it from falling again.
That was my last memory. I fell asleep for days, according to my mom. I finally woke up and saw my sister and uncle looking at me. I didn’t know what day it was or where I was. I asked my sister if I missed the quinceañera and she said no, that it was in a few days. She also said that the quinceañera might be delayed because she knew how much I wanted to be in it.
I knew I was still in the hospital when I saw the IV on my left hand (which wasn't the broken one). I wanted to go home because I felt insecure in the hospital. I was scared that the building was going to get caught on fire for some reason or that someone would come and try to kill me like they do in movies.
My mom then came into the room with my step-dad and asked me how I was doing and I told her I was doing fine. She then grabbed a chair and sat close to me. I asked her to turn on the T.V. because I wanted to watch cartoons. Before she changed the channel, I saw a commercial where this kid was holding a big stuffed animal. I asked my mom if she would get one for me. She replied with a "Yeah" and and asked if I wanted anything else. I was surprised because she would normally say “No, it’s too expensive” or “Why would you want that?” but I knew she was just doing it because she was scared.
I had always thought my mother didn’t love me because she would never get me anything, but at this moment I knew she truly did love me. I was so happy because now I could see perfectly fine and my mom was being nice to me. At the same time I was sad because I was on a hospital bed with broken bones.
When a nurse came to check on me, I asked her if I could go home. She looked at me with a sad look and told me no because I was severely damaged and that I had to stay in the Intensive Care Unit (ICU). I got scared and asked her what parts of my body were damaged. She said that I broke my left leg and right wrist, damaged my spleen, had a lot of stitches on my face, neck and a big cut on my right shoulder that wasn’t stitched for a reason that I can’t recall. I got scared because she was describing a monster.
I couldn’t believe that one car wreck did so many things to my body. Before the nurse left, I saw her talking to my mom. I asked my mom what was going on and she said that I wouldn’t be able to leave the hospital until next week. I told her that the quinceañera was in a few days and I didn’t want to miss it. She said that they would change the date of the quinceañera because she would feel bad going to a party when I was in bad condition at the hospital. It made me happy to know that I wouldn’t miss the quinceañera.
Five days later I felt so much better. My arm and leg were still hurting, but it wasn’t that big of a deal. When the nurse came to put a cast on my arm, I asked her if I could leave that same day to my house because I was feeling so much better. She said that she would ask the doctor and tell let us know.
An hour later she came to the room with some papers and told my mom to sign them so I could be released.

 

[eenie114]

I think this is so far the best chapter yet.
One thing, though. You mentioned your stepdad... I'm confused.

Was there an earlier mention of him, or some mention of your parents divorce? Sorry, I was tired when reading chapters 2-5, so maybe I just don't remember.

But other that that, it looks great.

 

[eenie114]

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Thanks! (wait until I write the sad part lol) I am going to use Lulu

maybe later on I will publish it with an agent, but not right now because I'm extremely busy with school and stuff lol Each chapter is about 1,200 words and that's kind of short, so if I ever publish it with an agent I will try to make each chapter about 10,000 + words

I wanted to explain things better and write more about each chapter, but school is not letting me O: lol especially these days since the final exams are coming up!

and good for you! what is your novel about? and it's okay, I don't get annoyed if someone asks me questions

Just be careful; I've read in a Writer's Digest magazine that agents are very wary of representing books that have been self-published, since other people may have already bought the book.

You may have plenty of luck just publishing it yourself.
And 10,000+ words per chapter?? Dude! 10,000 is like a third of a middle-grade novel!

If each chapter is that long, you may run out of story within two chapters. Was that a typo?
My novel is a rewrite of Cinderella. Kind of the backstory behind the search for her after she ran away from the ball.

Edited because I repeated myself.

 

[kyeschicks]

I can't change anything right now because I'm overly stressed! I had a high fever yesterday and I was about to go to the ER, I'm feeling better now but its coming back

I'll change it as soon as I can.

 

[eenie114]

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Oh, I'm sorry!

I hope you feel better soon. Prayers coming your way.
Don't feel like this story has to be perfect. It's only the first draft. I'm working on the fourth draft of my novel, and it's still not "good enough".
Get well soon!

 

[kyeschicks]

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Oh, I'm sorry!

I hope you feel better soon. Prayers coming your way.
Don't feel like this story has to be perfect. It's only the first draft. I'm working on the fourth draft of my novel, and it's still not "good enough".
Get well soon!

Thanks! and yes, I know it doesn't have to be perfect

 

[eenie114]

Perfection is overrated, it just leads to stress.

Wait, make that ''Trying to be perfect is overrated''.

 

[kyeschicks]

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Ok, I've changed it on my computer

it makes sense now

went to the dr. today and they checked my throat and said it was in pretty bad state :S but at least the fever is gone! haha Anyway, Thanks for reading along and letting me know my mistakes

 

[eenie114]

Blech. Get yourself some yummy non-mentholated cough drops, they're like candy.

No problem, I really enjoy reading it.