Mountain Peep's Awesome Chat Thread! (All friends welcome!)

[Yowza Wowza]

Uh......if you want you can review my latest fanfiction so far. Constructive criticism is encouraged. (I still have to edit some of the paragraphs so they make sense.)

You can edit some grammar in there.

 

[Americano Blue]

You can edit some grammar in there.

Also, when someone is talking it is a new paragraph.


Example.

June roamed the crowded streets on New York City, trying not to bump into any one rushing by. "Oh sorry." she said when she ran into a well dress man.

"Hey watch it!" The man snapped, barely stopping to looked at her.

"I said I was sorry.." Mumble June as she went on her way.

"Stupid kid." Groaned the man, when he assumed he was out of earshot.

 

[Chickenchick11]

You can edit some grammar in there.

Ok. I knew I had to edit some paragraphs/grammar in there. Thanks for the comment!



Yeah. I'm going to do it, before I publish it on Wattpad.com. (I just wanted to get it down quickly before I forgot it.) Do the characters sound believable, and like they do on the show?

 

[Americano Blue]

Ok. I knew I had to edit some paragraphs/grammar in there. Thanks for the comment!

Yeah. I'm going to do it, before I publish it on Wattpad.com. (I just wanted to get it down quickly before I forgot it.) Do the characters sound believable, and like they do on the show?

The most part. I feel like everyone was way to...willing to accept her...if that makes sense .

 

[Yowza Wowza]

Ok. I knew I had to edit some paragraphs/grammar in there. Thanks for the comment!
Yeah. I'm going to do it, before I publish it on Wattpad.com. (I just wanted to get it down quickly before I forgot it.) Do the characters sound believable, and like they do on the show?

Your welcome. ^-^
The characters could have a bit more detail in their actions.

 

[Chickenchick11]

The most part. I feel like everyone was way to...willing to accept her...if that makes sense . 

Ok, yeah that makes sense. Thanks for the comment!

Your welcome. ^-^
The characters could have a bit more detail in their actions.

Okay, will do.

 

[Americano Blue]

Ok, yeah that makes sense. Thanks for the comment!

Okay, will do.

No prob!

 

[Mountain Peeps]

I'm going to bed. Night everyone!

 

[Americano Blue]

Night Sis! Talk to you soon!

 

[Chickenchick11]

No prob! 

I'm going to bed. Night everyone!

Night Sarah.