The life of Sonnata!

[Symphony]

Doe's anybody like it????

 

[FarmCoe]

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I like it!

 

[Amigo]

"We'll name her....Elvis!

 

[Symphony]

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[Symphony]

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I like it!

 

[BirdNut]

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Are you positive that this story isn't about... heaven?

 

[Symphony]

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Are you positive that this story isn't about... heaven?

Why, because of ONLY chickens?

 

[luvinmychickens]

I like it! More! I want to see what the chicks name is! Hmmm... Like Amigo said - Elvis!

That would be funny!

 

[horsecrazychicklovingkid]

You need a heard between they and a, first paragraph. You spelled throughout wrong, second paragraph. That's all! That's great for your first paragraph! I wanna hear more! More! More! More!

 

[BirdNut]

I have a few constructive criticisms. Don't be offended or take it personally, because your plot looks very promising already, I'm only trying to help you make your story more fun and interesting.

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Blue text = Suggestions for colorful words, and adding variety.
Red text = Corrections.

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I was also confused why there would be a coop in a world entirely consisting of chickens; there's nobody to build it, and I doubt chickens would be dexterous enough or mentally capable of making one. But hey, if you want this story to be more on the fantastical side, go right ahead.