untitled a story about a girl

[ChickenRadio]

Very imaginative. I do think the grammar and spelling could be cleaned up a bit though. Perhaps it's something you should to think about - spell checking before posting. It would then come across as more professional.

Good start.
(I agree: the chapters should be much longer; right now those are only paragraph length.)

i know i'm just working on them. Might go through them once the book is done