Writing School

[cathloveydovey]

Didn't wanna read it. but... I'm glad someone finally added something.

Oh it seemed like you were excited to read it

 

[Fanci Feathers Marans]

Oh it seemed like you were excited to read it

 

[cathloveydovey]

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*nuzzles hand*

 

[Amer]

Character development. So I just wanna share with you this character that has been in my head since third grade. Little Timmy. He's evolved to a creature with more feelings over the years as I became a better writer.
White Leghorn chick. Stays in chick form for years because 'since when has growing up been a requirement?'
All the other chickens aren't as clever as him, and he doesn't want to spend his time in their company.
So he spends his time getting into trouble and playing tricks on the others. Always gets out of harm's way using his brains.
Clever in his way of disarming opponents.
His mother hatched him, and realised her mistake. She abandoned him to the hens, and they all take turns "babysitting" him, though he usually finds ways to get out.

Sometimes his father has to babysit him. His mother thinks his father owes her something, and as much as Timmy's father tries to take care of him, Timmy always gets into to trouble. Timmy's father is the underdog rooster btw. Timmy feels like his father is living up to his standards, like, he feels he should have some good trait from his father. He tells Foxy "he's a pitiful feathered stick," though Foxy wants to show how much his father should mean to him.
Timmy's mother has always been someone Timmy loved, even though his mother abandoned him. He can't forget that she hatched him, or the warmth of her body after she caught him trying to sneak off the first time. Misses his mother, but she's gone mad and run off into the woods because she's kind of created a monster. Timmy feels a little responsible for that, but he has the childish idea that he has no responsibilities at all.
His best and only friend Foxy, has a forbidden relationship with him. She is definitely not in love with him, nor him with her, but "a fox and chickens sound perfectly natural together," says Timmy. Unfortunately none of the hens think so, and neither does Foxy's mom. Though I have never really written directly about her, Foxy recalls that Foxetta (I know right) her mom doesn't want her making friends with the chickens, but eating them. Timmy and Foxy share a connection that way. Both of them have parents they don't truly love. (Though Foxetta is truly evil.)
I like Timmy because he is perfectly balanced between an over exaggerated troublemaker child and his feelings, and hopes and worries. What do you guys think of him?

Oh it seemed like you were excited to read it

I was and I did, I just didn't want to say what I felt about it. *guilty owner of thread*
It was good. But creepy.

 

[MagpieDucks]

Character development. So I just wanna share with you this character that has been in my head since third grade. Little Timmy. He's evolved to a creature with more feelings over the years as I became a better writer.
White Leghorn chick. Stays in chick form for years because 'since when has growing up been a requirement?'
All the other chickens aren't as clever as him, and he doesn't want to spend his time in their company.
So he spends his time getting into trouble and playing tricks on the others. Always gets out of harm's way using his brains.
Clever in his way of disarming opponents.
His mother hatched him, and realised her mistake. She abandoned him to the hens, and they all take turns "babysitting" him, though he usually finds ways to get out.

Sometimes his father has to babysit him. His mother thinks his father owes her something, and as much as Timmy's father tries to take care of him, Timmy always gets into to trouble. Timmy's father is the underdog rooster btw. Timmy feels like his father is living up to his standards, like, he feels he should have some good trait from his father. He tells Foxy "he's a pitiful feathered stick," though Foxy wants to show how much his father should mean to him.
Timmy's mother has always been someone Timmy loved, even though his mother abandoned him. He can't forget that she hatched him, or the warmth of her body after she caught him trying to sneak off the first time. Misses his mother, but she's gone mad and run off into the woods because she's kind of created a monster. Timmy feels a little responsible for that, but he has the childish idea that he has no responsibilities at all.
His best and only friend Foxy, has a forbidden relationship with him. She is definitely not in love with him, nor him with her, but "a fox and chickens sound perfectly natural together," says Timmy. Unfortunately none of the hens think so, and neither does Foxy's mom. Though I have never really written directly about her, Foxy recalls that Foxetta (I know right) her mom doesn't want her making friends with the chickens, but eating them. Timmy and Foxy share a connection that way. Both of them have parents they don't truly love. (Though Foxetta is truly evil.)
I like Timmy because he is perfectly balanced between an over exaggerated troublemaker child and his feelings, and hopes and worries. What do you guys think of him?



I was and I did, I just didn't want to say what I felt about it. *guilty owner of thread*
It was good. But creepy.

WHY DO ALL THE WEIRDOS HAVE TO BE NAMED TIMMY????!!!!!!

 

[Rose Quartz]

Character development. So I just wanna share with you this character that has been in my head since third grade. Little Timmy. He's evolved to a creature with more feelings over the years as I became a better writer.
White Leghorn chick. Stays in chick form for years because 'since when has growing up been a requirement?'
All the other chickens aren't as clever as him, and he doesn't want to spend his time in their company.
So he spends his time getting into trouble and playing tricks on the others. Always gets out of harm's way using his brains.
Clever in his way of disarming opponents.
His mother hatched him, and realised her mistake. She abandoned him to the hens, and they all take turns "babysitting" him, though he usually finds ways to get out.

Sometimes his father has to babysit him. His mother thinks his father owes her something, and as much as Timmy's father tries to take care of him, Timmy always gets into to trouble. Timmy's father is the underdog rooster btw. Timmy feels like his father is living up to his standards, like, he feels he should have some good trait from his father. He tells Foxy "he's a pitiful feathered stick," though Foxy wants to show how much his father should mean to him.
Timmy's mother has always been someone Timmy loved, even though his mother abandoned him. He can't forget that she hatched him, or the warmth of her body after she caught him trying to sneak off the first time. Misses his mother, but she's gone mad and run off into the woods because she's kind of created a monster. Timmy feels a little responsible for that, but he has the childish idea that he has no responsibilities at all.
His best and only friend Foxy, has a forbidden relationship with him. She is definitely not in love with him, nor him with her, but "a fox and chickens sound perfectly natural together," says Timmy. Unfortunately none of the hens think so, and neither does Foxy's mom. Though I have never really written directly about her, Foxy recalls that Foxetta (I know right) her mom doesn't want her making friends with the chickens, but eating them. Timmy and Foxy share a connection that way. Both of them have parents they don't truly love. (Though Foxetta is truly evil.)
I like Timmy because he is perfectly balanced between an over exaggerated troublemaker child and his feelings, and hopes and worries. What do you guys think of him?



I was and I did, I just didn't want to say what I felt about it. *guilty owner of thread*
It was good. But creepy.

Hmm, i think to continue to develop him you'll need to do some more character development on his parents. And how exactly their relationship works together. Having his mom still around might actually be better for explaining why he is how he is. Or could at least make for better conflict.

Writing is a way of showing how a person grows and changes. Your character shouldn't be the same person by the end of the book as they are at the beginning.

Maybe as an exercise place him in a situation that he cant get out of and have him rely on someone he doesnt trust or who he thinks is less intelligent to get him out of it. He can continue to treat them the same way he always has, it's the inner thought process the subtle changes that will solidify his character. Knowing what he'll do and why will help you know who he is.

 

[Amer]

WHY DO ALL THE WEIRDOS HAVE TO BE NAMED TIMMY????!!!!!!

Yes TIMmy?

Hmm, i think to continue to develop him you'll need to do some more character development on his parents. And how exactly their relationship works together. Having his mom still around might actually be better for explaining why he is how he is. Or could at least make for better conflict.

Writing is a way of showing how a person grows and changes. Your character shouldn't be the same person by the end of the book as they are at the beginning.

Maybe as an exercise place him in a situation that he cant get out of and have him rely on someone he doesnt trust or who he thinks is less intelligent to get him out of it. He can continue to treat them the same way he always has, it's the inner thought process the subtle changes that will solidify his character. Knowing what he'll do and why will help you know who he is.

I really want it to be a quest for his mother and a way to get know his father better. (Though he'll still get into a bit of trouble, as his nature.)
Foxy whom he does trust more than anyone, is going to teach him to love them. But there are obstacles along the way. The other chickens are chickenish, in the fact that they don't have much intelligence. But I know there is trust and fear and pain in chickens, and they certainly don't trust him. He is forbidden to go into the forest. And to go out at night. There are some clever motherly old hens out there, but then there's old Mrs. Silkie, and her mind is the dullest one around.
Foxetta also is a problem, always trying to eat him. But Timmy is more clever than a fox, you could say. And he always has another fox on his side to help him.
His father might try to help him find his mother, but he thinks all of the chickens don't meet his requirements, let alone his father, the scrawny chap he feels is what made his mother leave.
Timmy doesn't really feel that himself Timmy, would be the reason he left. He's kind of egotistical.

 

[Rose Quartz]

Yes TIMmy?

I really want it to be a quest for his mother and a way to get know his father better. (Though he'll still get into a bit of trouble, as his nature.)
Foxy whom he does trust more than anyone, is going to teach him to love them. But there are obstacles along the way. The other chickens are chickenish, in the fact that they don't have much intelligence. But I know there is trust and fear and pain in chickens, and they certainly don't trust him. He is forbidden to go into the forest. And to go out at night. There are some clever motherly old hens out there, but then there's old Mrs. Silkie, and her mind is the dullest one around.
Foxetta also is a problem, always trying to eat him. But Timmy is more clever than a fox, you could say. And he always has another fox on his side to help him.
His father might try to help him find his mother, but he thinks all of the chickens don't meet his requirements, let alone his father, the scrawny chap he feels is what made his mother leave.
Timmy doesn't really feel that himself Timmy, would be the reason he left. He's kind of egotistical.

Oh, i though you meant the other chickens were only nasty to him. He is a chick after all and chickens are not nice to motherless chicks.
You said that he doesnt love his parents. But it sounds like he does but he's convinced himself he doesnt so it doesnt hurt.

Are you currently able to answer the questions he'll have if he does track her down?(the fact that she's survived the foxes all this time might up his opinion of her.)

Why did you leave? (Would she tell him the truth)
If she does:
Whats wrong with me? What did i do to make you hate me? (These dont have to be spoken questions but the internal confict would be there at the very least and the writer is going to have to answer those questions, either with what Timmy decides is the reason which should at least attempt to maintain his self image, or with what his mother says.)

What would his fathers reaction be assuming he's there, what about foxy if shes there.

What would Timmy say to her?




^u^ my character creation is done a lot differently from most. Sorry if i sound like im trying to change him. Im not. i think what you have is a really good starting point.

 

[Fanci Feathers Marans]

Hmm. I has idea.

My favorite part of writing is actually the characters, so maybe one person could give a description/drawing of a character, and others could provide their personalities and vice versa.
I have a few chars I bought that I just can't get attached to (probably because I can't role play them) so they need some life put in them. Anyone?

 

[Rose Quartz]

Hmm. I has idea.

My favorite part of writing is actually the characters, so maybe one person could give a description/drawing of a character, and others could provide their personalities and vice versa.
I have a few chars I bought that I just can't get attached to (probably because I can't role play them) so they need some life put in them. Anyone?

Im not very good at that but some one might.