Writing School

[cathloveydovey]

I think I'mma just do a Skoll (My character) one because I can't decide on how to make this new character XD

gogogo

 

[cathloveydovey]

I don't know Bravery. ;-;

imagine what it is like then
stop procrastinating T_T

 

[Amer]

I think I'mma just do a Skoll (My character) one because I can't decide on how to make this new character XD

I always make a new character because I can't imagine this or that character in this or that setting. They are special to their plots.
Except Jadeheart.

 

[Ducklover2]

imagine what it is like then
stop procrastinating T_T

I've gotten a few sentances. I don't know how to introduce bravery. ;-;

 

[cathloveydovey]

I've gotten a few sentances. I don't know how to introduce bravery. ;-;

do a heroic act

 

[Ducklover2]

do a heroic act

;-;

 

[Ducklover2]

And i've erased those few sentences.

 

[Butterscotchbitesfinger]

Go ahead!


We all do

Me lick
I cant really give any criticism since we're really on the same level but I do see commas in unnecessary places


It wasnt hopeless! We have to start somewhere dont we?


*blocks and points to chair*
Sit the heck down.


I had a hard time choosing one too

Good job!
Again you're switching in and out of tenses here and there but you're getting better ^^
Unecasarry commas as well and areas where commas are needed (I absolutely suck at punctuation so don't worry about it)
One thing I see is that people- especially younger kids - use slang and words like 'things' and 'stuff' 'better' ect in their writing. Try not to use those words, it makes your writing a lot more formal and overall explicit for the reader.

Thx, I’m glad I’m improving at least now I’m awake. I do have a tendency to switch tences

 

[Ducklover2]

Misty, I can't pick a setting. ;-;

 

[Amer]

Misty, I can't pick a setting. ;-;

Old time England.