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[Nats Chickens]

Nina grinned, then shoved a broom into Cora’s hands. Cora groaned. “I thought I was going to get away with it.” She moaned. Nina pretended to look stern and waggled her finger under Cora’s nose, Cora swatted it away and began sweeping. Minta giggled and went back to the Window Room.

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But, as she entered, she saw, something sitting in the lounge chair. The something swiveled around and revealed itself to be the Wizard Gumwart. Minta gulped. “Hmm, very nice place you have here. Very nice.” Gumwart’s eyes flickered. Minta glared at him. “What are you doing here?” She bluntly demanded. Gumwart glanced in her direction, and shrugged. “That is on a need-to-know basis. You don’t need to know.” “Excuse me? This is my house! Get out!” Minta screamed. Gumwart glared at her.

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Down in the kitchen, Nina could hear the yelling. “What’s going on?” She muttered. She stalked up the stairs and up to the door of the Window Room, flinging it open. She gaped at Gumwart. “You! What are you doing?!” Gumwart snarled. “Trying to get your friend here to see sense!” Nina scowled at him, she had her wand, and he knew it. Cora appeared behind her in the doorway. “What the-?” She yelped. “Gumwart! What are you doing here?”

I decided the ending wasn't interesting enough and that defeating Gin was to easy, so I through Gumwart back in. What do you think?

 

[Nats Chickens]

I can't do horses well either.

 

[Nats Chickens]

I am not sure on the style yet anyways, I have about 8 days.

 

[Butterscotchbitesfinger]

I can't do horses well either.

Here I will draw a horse for you and you may use it if you like

 

[Nats Chickens]

Thanks! Could you pls do wings? If it is not too hard, she is a Pixie Horse after all. I could do on the cover: Illustrations by N. and E.

 

[Nats Chickens]

?” She pointed her wand at him. But her growled and pulled out his own. Minta flinched. Nina was waving her wand fast, but Gumwart was faster. Cora waved hers as well, trying to do a freeze spell on Gumwart’s wand.

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Gumwart obviously finished his spell because he aimed the wand at Nina’s chest. Zap! Nina crumpled onto the ground. Cora stared in dismay, but kept on doing the freezing spell. Now that Gumwart’s spell was no longer in the wand but in Nina, she had a small chance. She finished and Zonk! The freeze spell went strait for Gumwarts wand, but, Cora was a terrible aim, so she missed – and hit Gumwart instead.

 

[Butterscotchbitesfinger]

Okay done this is it. Sorry if you want them I will do a much better job and do them in colour

 

[Butterscotchbitesfinger]

Thanks! Could you pls do wings? If it is not too hard, she is a Pixie Horse after all. I could do on the cover: Illustrations by N. and E.

Sounds good, sorry the wings aren’t great but I will fix that if you want me to

 

[Nats Chickens]

They are really good! Do you think this bit is too cliche'? Or boring?

Gumwart let out a yell. And froze solid. Cora gasped. “Oops!” She went up to the statue and poked it. “Solid. What will we do with it?” Minta wasn’t listening, she was bent over Nina, who was out of the spell, but it had done its work. Cora gaped at Nina. She appeared to be burned. “A burn-spell.” Cora muttered. “He could have brought down Arcwilder.” She helped Minta get Nina into the lounge chair, then pointed her wand at the statue, “Asheila murune!” The statue disappeared. Cora bent over Nina. “Can we ix it?” Minta shook her head. “It doesn’t need fixing, she just needs her burns treated.” Cora nodded. She whistled and Rebecca and a small army of Magic Mice came, armed with bandages and cold cream. The soon had Nina fixed up in a jiffy.

 

[Butterscotchbitesfinger]

They are really good! Do you think this bit is too cliche'? Or boring?

Gumwart let out a yell. And froze solid. Cora gasped. “Oops!” She went up to the statue and poked it. “Solid. What will we do with it?” Minta wasn’t listening, she was bent over Nina, who was out of the spell, but it had done its work. Cora gaped at Nina. She appeared to be burned. “A burn-spell.” Cora muttered. “He could have brought down Arcwilder.” She helped Minta get Nina into the lounge chair, then pointed her wand at the statue, “Asheila murune!” The statue disappeared. Cora bent over Nina. “Can we ix it?” Minta shook her head. “It doesn’t need fixing, she just needs her burns treated.” Cora nodded. She whistled and Rebecca and a small army of Magic Mice came, armed with bandages and cold cream. The soon had Nina fixed up in a jiffy.

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