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[Nats Chickens]

Minta felt like she was being tickled with one thousand feathers for about three seconds, then it stopped. She got up from the floor she had landed on and blinked. It was grassy, and all signs of a door had disappeared. A cottage nearby held the sign ‘Gumwart: Potions and spells’ It was sunny, and warm enough. Cora let out a groan from the ground, Zlyde rolled over and leapt to his feet, helping Cora to her own two feet. Minta pointed to the sign. “Look.” Cora glanced at it. “We need to get outta here, in case he comes back.” Zlyde nodded in agreement. They took off in a southerly direction, because Minta and Cora both knew Gilderdash was in the south, having had it forced into their brains when they were nine.
Chapter 5

Lily led Nina, Binxi and Storm up to the front door of the cell marked ‘Witches’. “Here.” Nina carefully opened the door. Inside was not two witch girls, but a very angry looking Wizard. “What are you goblins doing?” He demanded. Binxi lowered her eyes, “We were sent to clean it,” She mumbled. Gumwart grumbled, then disappeared in a shimmer. Suddenly, there was banging at the door. Lily jumped. Gin himself appeared in the door. “What? What!” He roared. “Where are my witches?!” Nina’s eyes bugged. She could feel the disguising spell bein to fade. “Your witches?” She hissed. “YOUR WITCHES?!” Gin was taken aback for about five seconds, then he growled. “YES! MY WITCHES! WHERE ON THIS WORLD ARE THEY?!?!?!?!?” He roared. Lily nearly passed out. Storm nickered furiously. Gin lunged at Binxi, but she skipped away to the ceiling, shinning wings flapping. Storm aimed a kick at Gin, but he grabbed her by the leg. She sunk her teeth into his arm, trying to break free. Gin let out a howl of pain. He made a grab for Lily, clutch hold her wing. She screamed and grabbed hold of his scraggly yellow-brown hair, pulling ferociously. Binxi aimed a good kick in the chest. Gin roared. Nina grabbed Lily’s wand, which happened to be lying on the floor.

 

[Nats Chickens]

Minta and Cora were practically being dragged along by Zlyde, who had appeared to be recognizing his surroundings. Then, when they reached the top of a hill, puffing and blowing, he let out a shout, “My home!” He cried, throwing his hat in the air and whooping for joy. “Thank you so so much!” He gushed. “Goodbye girls!” He cried, and leapt off the side of the hill, running for his homeland. And that was the last either Cora or Minta ever saw of him, which is a good thing, because they had plenty more dangerous adventures, and he deserved a quite life, that poor troll. The witch girls watched him go up to the front gate, then they turned. “Well, back to Arcwilder,” Said Minta. Cora nodded. “Good old Arcwilder.”

 

[Nats Chickens]

Nina pointed the wand at Gin’s chest. “Alika tune! Magista lune!” She screamed. “Rodika nune! Leacha croone!!” Suddenly Gin stopped thrashing, and began shrinking. He kept on shrinking, shrinking and yelling, until he was the size of a pea. Nina picked up the yelling thrashing monster, then, “Alixa vune!” And a neat little cage appeared. Nina deposited the now tiny Gin in the tiny cage and waved Lily’s wand at it once more. “Magiska hune!” The cage disappeared. Gone forever. Nina collapsed on the floor, exhausted.

 

[Nats Chickens]

Minta and Cora let themselves in the front gate. They were greeted by a mob of very excited mice. But the mice stopped cheering as soon as they saw it was only them, the others had not returned. Rebecca turned white. “Where are Nina, Binxi, Lily and Storm?” She asked slowly. Minta looked surprised. “Why?” Rebecca shuddered. “Because, they went after you. Did you not see them? Didn’t they rescue you?” Cora snorted in surprise. “Rescue? We escaped.” Rebecca shook her head. “Oh dear. Oh dear dear dear!”

 

[Nats Chickens]

Lily shook Nina awake. “We’ve gotta leave, Nina, gotta go.” Nina nodded and stood up. The world spun, and she collapsed again. Lily was letting out fast, shaky breaths. “Binxi, can you and Storm carry her? Please say you can!” The horses nodded. Storm took Nina’s Collar and Binxi the elastic of her pants. Then, Lily opened the door. They hurried out as fast as they could, but they didn’t meet a single goblin. They had all vanished with Gin. They did hear a roar in the corridor. Lily turned. There, chained up, were two of the most beautiful Minx Dragons she had ever seen. “Oh my goodness,” She murmed. Quickly, she let them free. “Binxi! Storm!” The Pixie Horses turned, nearly dropping Nina in surprise. “Quick!” Ordered. Lily, and they were. Lily and Nina were soon on Blanca, Lily holding Nin tight and Blanca even tighter. Binxi and Storm were leading Flame, as they took off towards Arcwilder.

 

[Nats Chickens]

Rebecca was crying, as were loads of other mice and faeries. The Butterflowers looked depressed. Cora hugged Minta. “They’re alive. We need to go find them.” She said firmly. But Minta wasn’t listening. She was staring, open mouthed, at a speck on the horizon.

Lily flew Blanca gently over Arcwilder House. And landed gently. Nina stirred and sat up. She groaned. Flame landed slightly less gently nearby, with Storm and Binxi alighting near the stables. Minta squealed. “Nina!” Cora just stood in shock. The Magic Mice immediately stopped crying and started dancing for joy. The Faeries were doing cartwheels in the sky. The Butterflowers started shinning and flapping about the yard.

 

[Nats Chickens]

Nina stood up uncertainly. Minta and Cora helped her into Arcwilder, and lay her down on the lounge bed. “Where were you?” Minta demanded. Nina grinned. “In your cell! And don’t worry, we won’t have to worry about Gin ever again.” She closed her eyes, and had a good long sleep. When she awoke, feeling much better, everything was back to normal in Arcwilder. More or less, there were still two Minxes in the yard, and a brand-new outbuilding for them to live in.

 

[Nats Chickens]

It was all very well at Arcwilder, as Minta sat, finishing her book on the window-seat. Rebecca left her sweeping to go snuggle with the witch girl. Minta smiled. Cora burst into the room, covered in flour. Nina could be heard yelling in the kitchen. Minta giggled. Life was good. Very good.

The End

Was the end to rushed? To hurried? I need feedback peeps!

 

[Butterscotchbitesfinger]

Lily shook Nina awake. “We’ve gotta leave, Nina, gotta go.” Nina nodded and stood up. The world spun, and she collapsed again. Lily was letting out fast, shaky breaths. “Binxi, can you and Storm carry her? Please say you can!” The horses nodded. Storm took Nina’s Collar and Binxi the elastic of her pants. Then, Lily opened the door. They hurried out as fast as they could, but they didn’t meet a single goblin. They had all vanished with Gin. They did hear a roar in the corridor. Lily turned. There, chained up, were two of the most beautiful Minx Dragons she had ever seen. “Oh my goodness,” She murmed. Quickly, she let them free. “Binxi! Storm!” The Pixie Horses turned, nearly dropping Nina in surprise. “Quick!” Ordered. Lily, and they were. Lily and Nina were soon on Blanca, Lily holding Nin tight and Blanca even tighter. Binxi and Storm were leading Flame, as they took off towards Arcwilder.

Instead of fast shaky breaths could Lily be letting out fast shallow breaths?

 

[Butterscotchbitesfinger]

It was all very well at Arcwilder, as Minta sat, finishing her book on the window-seat. Rebecca left her sweeping to go snuggle with the witch girl. Minta smiled. Cora burst into the room, covered in flour. Nina could be heard yelling in the kitchen. Minta giggled. Life was good. Very good.

The End

Was the end to rushed? To hurried? I need feedback peeps!

Um yeah kinda, maybe elaborate more on the last paragraph