in black and white a story about a border collie

[mrpekinduck]

More please! Sorry I like writing in colors.

 

[Dapplepony]

I love writing in colors too!

 

[ChickenRadio]

chapter 3


I woke up one cold morning I looked around and saw that I was out side. I sighed and look at spike he was still asleep.
I got up and walked around there was food and water so I went to get a drink but the water was frozen.
I put my paw in the water and broke the ice the water was cold so I pulled my paw out and got a drink.
Spike had woken up now and was making his way over to me I sighed again. I wondered what Sam, Blaze, and Sara were doing right now.
I said hi to spike and walked off.

 

[HollyBird24]

Just a tip, you're using the word "I" a lot:

I woke up one cold morning I looked around and saw that I was out side. I sighed and look at spike he was still asleep.
I got up and walked around there was food and water so I went to get a drink but the water was frozen.
I put my paw in the water and broke the ice the water was cold so I pulled my paw out and got a drink.
Spike had woken up now and was making his way over to me I sighed again. I wondered what Sam, Blaze, and Sara were doing right now.
I said hi to spike and walked off.

If you switch up the way you write, it'll make it more interesting to read, and present a challenge to you. 6 out of the 7 sentances in that paragraph started with the word "I". It makes it sound like your writing a story in point for notes if that makes sense.

Other then that, keep it up

 

[Dapplepony]

Good job, sis. I'll help you with the punctuation at home.....

 

[ChickenRadio]

Chapter 4
I woke up as my owner grabed me. "Is she a good farm dog?" A man asked "I think so." Said my owner "Are you going to take her?" "Yeah." Said the man. My owner handed me to the other man who put me in a red truck. He handed my owner something and got in the truck. We drove for what seemed like hours finelly we drove thro a lage gate that closed behind us my new owner lifted me out of the truck a put me down a border collie as old as me came up. His eye widend "Lilly?" He gasped. "Lilly! I missed you so much!" "Blaze?" I gasped to "oh Blaze i thought i would never see you again! By the way Blaze where is Sam?" I asked. Blazes face fell "well there was a wolf attack and they killed Sam." "Oh." I looked down. "Come on lets go to the barn." Said blaze.