The life of Sonnata!

Discussion in 'Games, Jokes, and Fun!' started by Symphony, Sep 8, 2011.

  1. Symphony

    Symphony Vanilla, Little Airt Airt

    Doe's anybody like it???? [​IMG]
     
  2. FarmCoe

    FarmCoe Flock Mistress

    May 22, 2010
    Planet Earth
    Quote:I like it! [​IMG] [​IMG]
     
  3. Amigo

    Amigo Songster

    Jul 13, 2011
    Your house!
    "We'll name her....Elvis! [​IMG]
     
  4. Symphony

    Symphony Vanilla, Little Airt Airt

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  5. Symphony

    Symphony Vanilla, Little Airt Airt

    Quote:I like it! [​IMG] [​IMG]

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  6. BirdNut

    BirdNut Crowing

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    Quote:Are you positive that this story isn't about... heaven?
     
  7. Symphony

    Symphony Vanilla, Little Airt Airt

    Quote:Are you positive that this story isn't about... heaven?

    Why, because of ONLY chickens?
     
  8. luvinmychickens

    luvinmychickens Songster

    Jun 15, 2011
    Ohio
    I like it! More! I want to see what the chicks name is! Hmmm... Like Amigo said - Elvis! [​IMG] That would be funny! [​IMG]
     
  9. You need a heard between they and a, first paragraph. You spelled throughout wrong, second paragraph. That's all! That's great for your first paragraph! I wanna hear more! More! More! More!
     
  10. BirdNut

    BirdNut Crowing

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    I have a few constructive criticisms. Don't be offended or take it personally, because your plot looks very promising already, I'm only trying to help you make your story more fun and interesting.

    LEGEND:
    Blue text = Suggestions for colorful words, and adding variety.
    Red text = Corrections.

    Quote:I was also confused why there would be a coop in a world entirely consisting of chickens; there's nobody to build it, and I doubt chickens would be dexterous enough or mentally capable of making one. But hey, if you want this story to be more on the fantastical side, go right ahead.
     

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