Writing a story in a chicken's eyes! UPDATE Pg. 75!

[KFox]

 

[fishnet1971]

great. just great.... Now i am addicted.... more more!!!!!!!!!!! lol

 

[ChickLover98]

Thanks! Here's Chapter 4!

Today is an ordinary day. Prim and Daisy are still avoiding me, Onyx is still talking to me, and I’m still different. Well, except for Onyx.
I get up and get something to eat. I get bored, so I just plop down and go to sleep.
When I wake up, I hear a bunch of chicks squealing and making a racket. Oh no! What is happening? They’re all running around, crying with fear and tumbling over one another. They are falling into the soft and tripping on each other.
I frantically look around and I spot Onyx, Prim, and Daisy. I dash over to where they are huddled.
“What’s going on here?” I shout over the noise.
Before they have a chance to answer, a giant, pale hand dips down into our home and snatches up a yellow chick beside us! Now, I’m scared.
“They’re taking us!” Prim squeals loudly.
“What?” I yell.
“Duck!” Daisy screams.
“What? Where?” I ask, confused.
Just then, the hand scoops me up! I scream and make such a racket, kicking and chirping. In an attempt to flap my wings, the creature, which is called a human, tightens it’s grip on me. I try to bite it, but it is out of my reach.
It stuffs me in a box. I run, bashing into the walls and hurting myself.
“Prim! Daisy! Onyx! Please, someone, help me!” I cry.
No one answers me, but to my surprise, Prim is dropped down into the box, almost squashing me. Before I have time to say anything, Daisy is dropped on top of her. They scoot away from each other and huddle against a wall of the box.
I follow and shove myself in a corner. Nobody is saying anything because we are scared of getting picked back up.
Finally, Onyx and another chick are thrown into the box with us. We are all crying now.
“What’s going on here?” Daisy cries.
“I don’t know, but I’m scared!” Prim cheeps.
“Help us!” I chirp as the lid on the box is closed.
I can’t see a thing in the dark box, but we use our voices to let each other know where we are. Now, we huddle up in the middle of the box, Prim and Onyx, asleep. I have no idea how they can sleep on the hard box floor.
Suddenly, the box shakes and I hear some foreign human voices. I can’t understand what they are saying, but I know it must be horrible.
I can tell we are in the air now, being carried by the humans. One of them shakes the box hard and I go flying into a wall. Ouch. I cheep in disgust and the stupid humans coo at me. Do they think that I am cute? Do they think that my pain is funny? I’m mad now.
And, where in the world are we going?

 

[fishnet1971]

that's it, I am NOT reading any more until you have at least 15 minutes of reading done...

i keep checking back and want to turn the page to see the next one.....lolol

 

[Theeggboxtoo]

 

[ChickLover98]

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I'm working on chapter 5 now.

 

[ChickLover98]

Ok, chapter 5 is a bit longer.

The box continues to shake and sway and we can’t see where we are going. Now, we are all scattered about the box, trying to steady ourselves, as we are bounced about the thing. More human voiced are heard as we hover in the air.
It is freezing cold in the dark box, with no light to keep us warm. Finally, the chick that we don’t know breaks the ice.
“Hi, what are your names?” it chirps out.
“I’m Primrose,” Prim answers.
“Hi, I’m Onyx,” Onyx responds.
“My name is Daisy,” Daisy cheeps.
“And I’m Cloudy,” I finish.
“Hi everyone, I’m Lilly. Nice to meet you,” Lilly chirps.
I can tell Lilly is a bit awkward. She stumbles about a lot and can’t quite see right. She’s very sweet, though.
“Nice to meet you, too,” Prim says, for all of us.
We talk with Lilly for a bit, and then we all get tired and fall asleep. I have a horrible dream, too.
I am in a dark tunnel and I can’t find my way out. Onyx is at the end of the tunnel, but no matter how fast I run, he never gets closer. I hear his voice encouraging me to keep going, but instead, I fall because I am too weak.
I’m moaning, telling him that I am sorry that I can’t keep going and he turns around and walks away. I lay there, crying.
And when I wake up, I’m on the floor of the box, crying. Everyone thinks I’m still sad because of the whole box thing, but it was the dream that upset me this time.
Now, we are no longer in the air, we are sitting down on something. We just don’t know what, because we are still in the box. There is a loud noise that sounds like an angry roar that startled us all. Then, there is a constant whirring sound and we all get thrown back to the back of the box.
Wherever we are going, there are lot’s of twists and turns. We are jostled around the box, yelling and cheeping in fright.
I accidentally ram into Onyx.
“I’m sorry! I’m sorry!” I squeak sadly.
“It’s ok, Clouds,” he answers.
Oh, wow! He’s got a nickname for me! Clouds! It’s so pretty! I feel like dancing around, but instead I am thrown to the opposite side of the box, where I ram into Daisy.
“Sorry!” I call to her.
“It’s fine, just watch where you’re going!” she responds.
It’s kind of hard to control where you are going when you are being thrown around in a small box. Eventually, we are all bruised up and painful from that bumpy ride.
The bumps come to a stop and the whirring sound is shut off. I hear a door opening and we are being picked up again. The box sways back and forth and we are thrown around again.
We are carried up some stairs and I hear another door. Onyx, Primrose, Daisy, Lilly, and I are on separate sides of the box, to minimize ourselves from bumping into each other again. I am in a corner, where I peck out a bit of the box so that I can see what’s going on outside of here.
It reminds me of being in the egg, not being able to see very much. I don’t like the feeling.
We go through a doorway and into a cool room where there is a small plastic tote box with a heat lamp over it.
“We’re here, guys! Come look!” I call out.
Everyone comes dashing over and takes a turn looking through my hole. Pretty soon, everyone has made holes to see out of.
We are set down on a table and the human that was carrying us walks away. We cheep in disappointment, wishing that it would put us in the warmth again. We are all hungry and thirsty.
I stare out my hole and see the human return. It picks the box up again, but we are not headed toward the brooder! It walks us across the kitchen and out a back door.
What we see astonishes us.

 

[ChickLover98]

I'll do Chapter 6 after lunch

 

[Theeggboxtoo]

 

[Frost Homestead]

I read the first part and now when I checked back you've written so many new parts, awesome job. I can relate to this because I just got 4 little EE chicks. especially the part about my hand reaching in to pick them up!